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Mourning Clothes

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In the dark time, the deep time
in a chair by the closed window
through the cracks and flaws
the rain steals towards bare feet
drowning them
submerged, up to her waist, her neck
she can’t move
a shuddering spark
brushes her left eye, lashes
extending from a possibility
in a fog that disappears
joining the dots, the chords
the sinews
of their hearts

 

 

And tomorrow
when they return
she will cast aside her mourning clothes
draping her hair with mist
his hand in hers
they head for the ridge
dew and white lilies
the flowers of twilight

 

 

Between his searching eyes
and her tears
they carry a suitcase
packed always
and in the distance
so many journeys
so many poems
two souls
with only the lowering sky 
                                 between them

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Mourning Clothes
©crisstiena

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Image: Widow by Kelly Ann Thomas @ Picasso Dreams

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  • zt
    February 20, 2009

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    Lovely imagery in this. The last stanza was my favorite. It really brought the feeling home for me. For your cheri, eh?


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    Exotic. Elegant. Divine.


  • Rowan gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    There's some very wonderful sounds and word choices here, and even the repetition of pronouns and articles works with the rhythm rather than against it, a hard device to pull off. I'm horrible at writing love poems, they're either too mushy, or too morose. lol. I really liked this one. Good luck in the contest.