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The Price.

Happiness holds a price above my head
as stars dim in the night, a soul's breath freezes.
Prophecies hold together the dreams
that life ripped away.

Whispered words of life wither
in the eyes of truth
as lullabies gather sunflowers
draping them across the ocean of possibilities.

Justify the sickness that seeps
through your lips with a touch
only an experienced sinner makes.

Keeping hearts desires unborn
in the picture perfect moment
of an innocent kiss, [happiness has its price]
as laughter digs a crater in the center of the world

Swaying in the shadow of your arms
heads tilt upon the curve of a bestowed smile
only to fall in the crack made by promises not kept.

Laying hands upon the burn mark
rivers roll across letters once said,
hugs given in friendship only to be lost
like the rest of a child's dreams.

 

Linger in a moment

As the price of life

smiles upon my sorrow...

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Credit:__In_Her_Eyes___by_Anathematixs

Having a little trouble with writing lately..lol.




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  • I'm loving your wordsssssssssss
    very well, vivid write I say

    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 22

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    Wow,

    Some very powerful lines here you have seeping through your painful pen within my friend. Just divine in the sense of sorrow's truth. I wish things could be different, for I for one believe in that unconditional love, but have been hurt from lost friendships, and for wearing my heart on my sleeve as well. I guess it comes with a price, sometimes a very high price, being that we tend to lose ourselves sometimes when we fall. It sure is nice having someone such as yourself in my life, just knowing how wonderful your heart is, and you sharing it here with me, and others who appreciate you, I am blessed, and that just goes to show you, you are truly a blessing! Peace.

  • So true..and so much deep revcealation is here bringing the messages of the life around it..well done my friend..and thank you so much for the wonderful work...


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 2, 2008

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    Gorgeous!!!! You did a very lovely job with this write!!! This is incredible!!! I love the way you portray this write!!! You have an excellent flow!! Beautiful!!!


  • In Too Deep1
    October 2, 2008

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    This is so sad, yet beautiful. I have sat attempting to muster words that would not bend or fray the sentiments etched in emotion. Ultimately, i have come to realize that not all things of beauty need explaining. This is one of such. A most enjoyable and heart touching writ. Thanks for sharing.


  • No More Lies
    October 2, 2008

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    Beautiful. This brought a tear to my eye. The first verse certainly brings the reader in, wanting to read on.
    Good work.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    deep

    and very sad, you have sparked some strong images in my mind poetess. very intense and dark place you seem
    all too often to be in. hope this is just your creative talent and nort your reality.


  • Lady Australis silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    what are you talkin about!!!?? this was so amazeing im in shouck lol wow my flower angel just wow
    you spoke so much with this peice


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    I don't think you have any trouble with your writng judging by this sissy!!

    So sad.. we all been here I believe...


  • playjazz67
    October 2, 2008

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    You certainly have solved your writing troubles with this offering. The last two lines just keep ringing in my mind...

    Jim


  • thejollytinker
    October 2, 2008

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    Yeah, you must be a Taurus. Join the club, we have matching jackets and everything... Just plain clear and easy to read with emotion guarded by a wise cynicism.


  • poppa
    October 2, 2008

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    wonderful write hun... guess we have all been here huh... trust someone and then become aware of their lies and deceit ...loving the imagery


  • notorious gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    "a soul's breath freeze's".
    ==>a soul's breath freezes

    If there's an apostrophe, generally speaking, it's a possessive form.

    "Prophecy's hold together"==>Prophecies
    Not a possessive form.

    That third stanza...
    the strongest of all of them! Just loved it, especially the 'only' you used--very strong.

    "[happiness has it's price]"==>should be 'its' W/O the apostrophe. You're not saying "it is".

    "Linger in a moment As"
    Why is the 'as' capitalized? Was that a typo, or did you intend a line break???



    Jessica

    Haven't given you a looong comment in a while and vice versa


    • Angelflower
      October 2, 2008

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      Lol. it was meant to be a line break.. yeah it has been a hwile since I've had a long comment from you I was beginning to feel unliked!!! lol.

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