The day I first saw you
Standing in a crowd of people
You turned and smiled at me
As if I were the only one in the room
The day you asked me to go out with you
Treating me like I were a queen
You borrowed your dad's old car
Took me to a movie and dinner too
The day I told you I was pregnant
You said you wanted to marry me
We moved in together to be a family
But the wedding never came
The day you told me you loved me
Turned and walked out the door
Haven't seen you in a year or two
Guess I never will again
You shook me all those times
as if I were a rag doll
You took a hold of my heart
squeezing it for all your worth
A contest entry
- Snapdragons in June-More Options Added! May enter more than once! by Randomly Beautiful.
450 points, ended October 13, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I appreciate the time and entry very much. Though I prefer to be shown more than told. Best wishes.
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The ending it not at all what I though it'd be. Def. an unexpected twist. You really showed that even when things seem totally perfect, they still can crash. I think you showed your feelings good.
Good luck in the contest. <3
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Thank you very much you are too kind.
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A relationship summed up in a few lines - the whole mood, the emptiness. I can see him... you made me see him...
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I'm glad you could see what I was tring to say. It was a lesson learned the hard way.
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wow this is really unexpected
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Thank you you are very kind.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Wow, this is touching. A twist I didn't expect. The first few are such wonderful memories.... and then the unexplained twist. I think you've really made me feel what you intended. Keep writing.
~Diana
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Some times life has lessons to teach us even when we are not ready for them. Thank you for such kindness.
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