You do not give me what my heart desires;
my heart desires more than you provide.
Provision has its place but knows its bounds,
the boundaries of my heart can not be found.
I founder in this recess you provide -
vide supra, see above, and give me life!
Author notes
a wreath is formed by taking something from the end of each line and weaving it into the next. The idea comes from and is loosely based on the 17th century poem, "A Wreath", by the Welsh poet George Herbert: http://allpoetry.com/column/2346469
vide supra means "see above" in Latin.
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Comments
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Very nicely woven. I particularly like the way you rhyme, loose and free. I like the way this even directs the reader via vide supra to ring back to the top.
K
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This form is interesting. I might just try writing one myself once I get the time. You have done a wonderfully beautiful job here, poet. You tied everything together wonderfully and I loved the Latin phrase thrown in at the end.
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