Your touch
Your voice
Your scent
It's always there
Even when I leave
I still feel you
Your presence still haunts me
In the warm spring air
My passion is to admire
Your strength
Your brilliant soul
Your loving interest
I feel secure in your arms
I feel mild being close to you
Your voice is soothing in my ears
You are my only melody
My heart sings when it hears yours
My eyes looks at yours when you look at me
My ears ring when I hear you
My mind can't stop thinking about you
I smell your hair in my nose
I feel your smooth skin when I touch your face
I kiss your soft lips to make this real
I'm glad you are still here
Our feelings for each other may be gone
But, our memories still live on
Author notes
I wrote this when I liked, loved someone who was important to me. And, he still is. My feelings for are slowly going away. But, they don't want the memories to die. So here it is.
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I like that
It has a very beautiful message and emotions to it. Well done.
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Lovely! Warms my heart.
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Thankyou so much for entering
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Billy (Rhythm Child)
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I think this is nice and I like the original way you have laid out the poem. What I like best is the emotion of the piece and how you have thought about why you loved this person.
I do have a bit of a problem with the first line in the third stanza, I just think it's too many words, I think it sounds better to say 'my passion is to admire'. thank you for entering my contest. -
awww very sweet, adorable poem....your style of writing is very much like mine...thanks heaps for entering and good luck
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Very sweet and nicely written with a good flow. My only critique is what I'm giving everyone and that's that the piece is slightly cliche. Perhaps try inserting some strong imagery or more descriptive pieces?
Overall, I liked it. A nice feel good tribute to someone you care about.
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very very sweet poem...really enjoyed reading it i loved the line "i kiss your soft lips to make it real" very loving and cute!!
Good luck!!
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