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A Dollar for Every Time

[This one's for every time you were that nightmare]

I'm breaking down and you're breaking up.
Re-entering my atmosphere and tearing down every
defence that youyouyou forced me to erect.
I wish I could tell you to fuck off
like I've always wanted to, but there's
only so many times you can break my heart.
What does one more matter?


[& for every time you left me to c|harm my way out]

I'm going under and you're going over[the top].
Long distance phone calls to say you never meant
goodbye and emails that read like ransom notes
or love letters you never wrote. It's killing me

to see you drag me in again. Doll, I can already

taste the sour residue of denouement as the

tequila struggles to find it's way past

my swollen vocal chords.

 

[&& for the times I tried to find your voice beneath the static]

 

 

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  • xDarKRosE
    October 2, 2008

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    I love it. As I was reading I felt so sad. Its like I know exactly how you feel.. I have been there before. The emotions are raw.. and thats great. Your an amazing poet. Keep it up, I love reading your poems. I hope everything is ok.

    -Tammy


  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    I like how it is now, but it does seem as if it has somewhere to go. I like the way you [use] brackets in certain places.. it's creative and unique

    You might want to use a spell check, i noticed a few errors, particularly towards the end

    Great story though and very emotionally evocative writing. well done