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Can I?...No

I want to cry
    Somehow I can’t manage it
I want to hold you
    I know it’s impossible
I want to die
    I don’t have the courage
I want to scream
    My throat tightens
I want to look at you
    I’m too shy
I want to die
    But I don’t
I want to cry
    But I won’t
I want to give up
    But I hope
I only have hope
    Nothing else
Especially not you.

Tell me the truth: Lame or Extremely Lame? Like so lame that you want to puke.

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  • aidenspektor
    October 1, 2008
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    It's ok...not gonna lie its not your best, but it's definitely not bad.


  • feetus
    October 1, 2008

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    Puke? Nah. I actually thought it was quite clever.
    The title captured my interest, and the rest reinforced it. It conveys emotion and pain without being generic.
    Good work & thanks for sharing

    • KalliopePhoenix
      October 1, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the comment! Very much appreciated. Thanks for the happy men too Glad you didn't puke, by the way.