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I finally learned to open up

outstretched toward your forgiving light


embrace this me
              dirty
                lovely
                  OPEN


finally


          petrified
            since the moment you
left.



you wanted too much

breathing?



it only chips away at my bark

Author notes

i hope you like it anutie

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  • Nicada silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    This is a very unique poem and you did a nice job with the 30 words prompt. Great job, and thanks much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    Very interesting form makes for a unique and captivating read, poet. I enjoyed this creative write! Well done! Thanks so much for entering my contest. Be proud of your work! It’s an honor to have it shown here!


  • etoile
    October 8, 2008

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    finally


    petrified
    since the moment you
    left.
    ---
    i loved that part!!
    it was great.
    this was written so well in just 30 words.
    eeek brilliance <333
    love youuu

    best of luck in the contest


  • stylization
    October 6, 2008

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    Ooh. You only had thirty words? And you could write this? That's insanely good. (I have to kee this short cos I'm in Architecture class right now...) but I love every bit of it, the formatting, everything. Best of luck!


  • Hell In Harmony
    October 5, 2008
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    LOVE this.
    really.
    beautiful.

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