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Cry for...

For the gentle breeze stirred from a fluttering of snow laced eyelashes,
for the dance of stray strands of pale hair escaping into the crips air,
for the disdainful curve of dainty lips,
for that cold, penetrating, closed off stare,
I cry for Virgo.

For the isolated feelings of hopelessness,
for the cold skin and stilled heart,
for the demure system of thinking analytical to the end,
for that broken down, soul, torn apart,
I cry for Her.

For the ruined emotions of a stranger,
for the bleeding past of desolation,
for the labrythine lies,
for that shattered streetlight of absolute resolution,
I cry for Me.

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  • raw love
    October 11, 2008
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    this was beautifully penned. Very nice, deep one


  • endless-lover silver member
    October 11, 2008

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    loved the poem doll
    you had good use of words
    and the flow was great,
    deep write keep it up up much love


    vanna


  • Juggalette 4 LYFE
    October 10, 2008
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    LOVE IT

    love the detail and the sensitivity i guess you could call it......


  • Christina-is-crazy
    October 9, 2008
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    wow, such a deep poem.
    I really like it though.
    Such a great word choice...


  • Beauty Of Silence
    October 9, 2008

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    omgosh! this is such a deep write. it was beautiful, and your lines were so pure and they flowed so well. wise word choice. keep penning buddy! this was awesome!


  • catalyst.
    October 7, 2008

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    I loved this. It all flowed so smoothly into the last line. I love the emotion in this


  • HaileeDear
    October 7, 2008
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    Wow, the emotion is so raw. I dig it

  • Topnotchsy
    October 6, 2008
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    This is a really powerful vivid piece. Nice write!! Best of luck in the contest.


  • Mystery
    October 4, 2008

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    Wow that poem is amazing I wish I could write like that. I love the emotion in it. Your a really gd writer.


  • Re-invention silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    wow... nice emotion and passion here... this amazes me for you took the prompt to a whole new direction which is always good.
    I would appreciate it if you would follow the rules k? I wouldnt like to remove this awesome poem
    nicely done! very much enjoyed!


  • xrain dancerx
    October 1, 2008

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    another great poem. i wish u thought of urself, but u dont. so this poem is like a...lie i suppose. im used to u speaking from the heart. well maybe it is from the heart just not the ending...
    *hugs* Tessa
    (ur sis)


    • SoldiersRain
      October 1, 2008
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      I don't really understand what you mean by this poem being a lie. The last stanza is more from the heart than anything else...so I really don't know what you mean at all. Sorry. Thanks for the comment sis.

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