I've got a secret
I'll never tell.
I've got a secret,
and I love it well.
Maybe I've ridden
on a plume-winged whistle-bird.
Maybe I've hidden
and heard what should not be heard.
Maybe I have the power
to turn you into the fish.
Maybe I've found a flower
that will grant my dearest wish.
I've got a secret
I'll never tell.
I've got a secret,
and I love it well.
Maybe I've found a book
full of gruesome spells and blood.
Maybe I've learned to look
through a solid wall, or mud.
Maybe I have been promoted
to the Queen of all the Earth.
Maybe I've spent lives devoted
to the study of rebirth.
I've got a secret
I'll never tell.
I've got a secret,
and I love it well.
Shhhh!
Author notes
Actually, the real secret is the original lyrics to the second half of the second verse. I decided that they should remain unknown, mostly because they name the real secret.
A contest entry
- Make me smile by XxForeverFaithfulxX.
1150 points, ended November 1, 2008, 9 entries
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Awesomeness!
I loved this! It was funny and awesome. Thanks for entering and good luck.
~Kayla
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i like it! i really wasnt going to ask what the secret was (although your author notes turned my brain inside out - ow) until i read your comment to twila - gr! now i am stumped. because i wasnt really thinking anything. anyway, i love it. i can never manage more than a chorus, so i am in awe.
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Lol, now you have me curious as to what the secret is! >,< I like the rhythm in this, it flows really well and the rhyming is done well too. ^^ I'd say my favorite part is probably the fourth stanza because it seems more full of mystery and provoking things. I also like how you ended it with "Shhhh!" because that makes the reader think that they already know the secret, but yet they don't, which is a cool effect. Great job with this and keep writing!
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i think i know....
Great job with this one!! I love the line, "Maybe I've hidden/and heard what should not be heard." It's really vivid. I also love the "Shhhh!" at the end. It's a really nice way to end this. Fantastic!!
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Nope, you don't know. Nobody knows. Ye shall never know. Hehehehehe. *evil grin* Although some of it does have something to do with what you're probably thinking about.
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u should tell us PLEASE!
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