Testing one, two, three
green light
systems go
ignition throttled
and the words start to spill
like a shot from a starting gun
deep in the reclusive awkward child
of my head
a 100 meter dash of personal prideful dementia
and bragging rights around
the water-cooler
this gossip fountain can't bode well for me or the impression
of able-to-walk-talk-and-function-at-the-same-time
Life3.0, if you want to be technical about it
(but you don't)
The drawing board leans against the whitewash
and quietly chides and I-told-you-sos
The white coats are not concerned
Cause it's just a field check.
Status - not ready for real life.
But let's throw it out there anyway.
Author notes
#4- an experiment/test
A contest entry
- Do You Have An Interesting Mind? by SomeGirlYouKnew.
1850 points, ended October 4, 2008, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does it make sense?? Does it pop?
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wow, this is spectacular....the diction, ur crazy-awesome style, the form, the awesome machine-human juxtaposition...its ridiculously good...keep writing and doing what you do best
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you write the absolute coolest poetry, most of the time i barely get it, but i love reading it hah
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this was so different, and very well done.
i enjoyed reading it.
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oh, wait, can I edit it before the contest is over?? I see some things I don't like...
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yeah you can still edit it, but klsa;jfd;lkasjfdas;l why did you reply to my comment. now its not anonymous. (i should have guessed this was you anyway. your style is distinctive like that.)
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