Drowning yourself,
in your blood, in your tears.
Your emotions are a maelstorm, you
are filled with tumult.
You feel like dying,
dissapearing.
Thrown against a wall you
are shattered, no longer
able to be stable, the yells
and screams among other wonderful things...
Feelings of stress,
a knot in your stomach... guilt.
"This is because of you,
do you see what
you started?"
A nod of the head,
and then waved away.
They say you only care about yourself;
you're a rude little shit
and a conceited little bitch.
How can that be?
Oh, how can that be when
you care about everyone except yourself...
Suffocated, feels like
you're drowning..
you could
end it..
Right Now...
You're alone, all alone,
its quiet..
not a sound..
except for the..
BANG!
Author notes
This is actually prewritten but I didn't have it submitted here. I actually wrote it last year in March.
A contest entry
- September is Suicide Awerness and Pervention Month by FallenFromGrace1102.
2620 points, ended October 3, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The lines, "you know this is because of you" sent a shiver down my spine, because so many kids find themselves being told that - almost in a mantra until they believe it, which is both horrifically sad, and terribly wrong... well written!
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Great write i love this . keep up the awesom work. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you so much for entering this piece. i really liked the lines:
"Suffocated, feels like
you're drowning..
you could
end it..
Right Now...
You're alone, all alone,
its quiet..
not a sound..
except for the..
BANG!"
*~*bee*~* -
I loved the emotion in this, so many different feelings at once, like a big cloud that just won't go away! Many people tend to feel this way
I did actually like the ending, it kind of just sums it all up. Although I hope this isn't/won't be true.
You did a good job on this
And I wish you the best of luck in the contest
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