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Daddy's Intentions

I never meant to hurt you
never meant to place a tear in your eye
never wanted you to sit in that chair
as you had to watch me die
I never meant to hurt you
never wanted you to be
anything thing remotely close
to the fuck up that was me
I never meant to hurt you
leaving you with so many questions on your heart
I never meant any of it
and that was the hard part
I never meant to hurt you
causing you to doubt who you are
make you feel as though you are trapped
I know you can go so far
I never meant to hurt you
never meant for you to witness
all the things about myself
that make you question your weakness
I never meant to hurt you
steal from you or lie
I never meant to break promises
then tell you not to cry
I never meant to hurt you
never meant to make you hate the reflection of me
that when you look at yourself
you undoubtedly see
I never meant to hurt you
leave you without any answers
questions eroding your soul
like small little cancers
I never meant to hurt you
by leaving you here in this life
filled with so much of my anger and torment
forced to deal with its strife

I never meant to hurt you
I know you have more strength than I had
I never meant to hurt
I always meant to be a better dad…


JayLynn
2004 All Rights Reserved

Author notes

Well this was inspired by a contest I just entered with a poem about my mom.  Basically you are supposed to write a first person narrative of what you had always needed/wanted them to say.  (Them being your parent).  I wrote what I wanted her to say in Mommy's Sorrow and this is what I wish my dad had said or could say.

This is the link to Mommy's Sorrow, allpoetry.com/poem/464375

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Written January 24th, 2004

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  • Onyx Dragon
    February 15, 2004
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    hey sweetie, beautiful poem and congrats on the silver!! It was well deserved There really are so many things we regret after something happens to someone we love, and you expressed that in here wonderfully. Love you girly

  • semperfichic
    February 15, 2004
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    excellent

    this is a very interesting poem i really like this, not only did it touch me and make me feel from it's vivid words....i had a dead beat dad so this relates closely to home....thanks for such an inspiring write


  • tornupNtwisted
    January 27, 2004
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    awsome

    I adore this and your compassion and true remorse that just oozes from it, i recently wrote a poem like this but from the oposite perspective. I wrote it from the child's view, my own for my father was pretty shitty to me. please check it out. tyhanks for such a great read. i look forward to more views from you.
    great job, tornupNtwisted


  • FlawedDestiny
    January 27, 2004
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    I like this alot. It's very good. Painful to read and it brings back memories of my own father. This is really sad but you wrote it so well. I really enjoy your work.
    ~*Misty*~


  • dp robertson
    January 27, 2004
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    That is so moving, thank you for letting me know about it. Its great. You are such a good writer and thanks for all your support, it is always appreciated

    David


  • Maryann22
    January 25, 2004
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    this is a wonderful poem alot of emotion in it and all in the right places sounds great. i know this must have been hard for you to write but you can feel the love that was penned in this poem keep writing and always share your poetryfriend


  • Candice Bezanson
    January 25, 2004
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    I cant tell you how much i really liked this poem. I have felt many of the things that your poem describes toward my biological father and i just really could relate to it. I am very glad you wrote it becasue I very much like it and hope to read more of your stuff L9( Great write!

  • Save
    January 25, 2004
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    You used great repetitivity, and it was really moving, you used gerat emotions and word choice to draw attention!

  • Faithcomesin
    January 24, 2004
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    Aww this poem is sad, I felt. U write with power, I see how much u give ur heart and combine it into words. Im sorry about ur dad....Even our love ones are scared to face the words that should be spoken. exceptionally well written. Thanks for sharing. Luves, Me


  • In-fin-ite
    January 24, 2004
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    I didn't come up with it. It came up with me. Just took our relationship and my issues and combined to what I wanted to hear I guess.

    ~JayLynn
    Edited on Jan 24, 2:01 p.m. because ''.


  • Mizuki wolf
    January 24, 2004
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    Great

    Hey how did you come up with this I know that poem oh well it's really good Keep up the good work.

    ~Demon Angel~

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