The sound of the waterfall is filling this empty room
Drip, drip, drip
So many drops sounding like drums
It’s so distance yet so close
It fills the heart with joy
And the mind with suspicions
So the wind blows up so strong
Leaving her a cordless corpse
Unplugging her heart and mind
She prays with trembling breaths for some peace
Tick, tick, tick
The clock swallowed up the years
And her choice is still laid down to sleep
Swimming in an indecisive world
She lost her soul inside her broken thoughts
And the mind and heart still cordless
Indecisive in a world of lies
Stealing a peek through the half-closed door
And laying down on unpolished floor
Drip, drip, drip
A pool is forming at her feet
Reflecting her blood-shot eyes
As she cries
In silence
On her cordless corpse being
Author notes
I'll keep revising this till 7th october, so please any comments and criticize are very very welcome.
Prompt ( beside the contest title 'Cordless'):
“When the heart and mind’s desires clash, unplugging the cord between them will bring peace but will create a cordless corpse…”~me
Thanks for reading!
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A contest entry
- Titles and Options Contest! by movedon.
950 points, ended October 7, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Noor. Wow. You always amaze me with your work. This was very deep and filled with emotions and I absolutely loved it. Great work
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This is a very deep and tjought provoking piece of work that conjurs up great imagry, it is the kind of poem that makes me ache inside, like hands lrft in the cold too long without gloves, the pace of the world slows while i am reading it, and the title is very illusive and beautiful good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing littlrfishone
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Please revise as much and as often as you see fit! nothing is final until after the contest closes! Beautiful work here...I really like where you went with the title! I was expecting a phone or something...seeing as when I was writing this my father was complaining about the cord phone we still have in the kitchen area
Thanks for entering darling!
ing alone,
Mylee -
why yes you can!
Your title is:
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Thankds, That was a very nice title. I added the poem and hope you don't mind if I keep revising till the contest closes.
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