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Crimson Masterpiece

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Rage inspired
  high-velocity blood splatter
  decorates nearby a wall
  like an abstract painting ~
  the artist's eyes
  flair with lightening,
  his masterpiece now complete.

A work of genius,
  blood-lust, passion, hate ~
  every drop, smear, smudge
  absolute perfection,
  madness portrayed
  with delicate precision.

A faceless corpse
  served as his palette,
  providing more than ample amounts
  of fresh, thick crimson...
Each strike of his hammer
  a brushstroke ~
  lush, red patterns
  upon a textured whitewall canvas.

Satisfied,
  he photographs his latest work,
  another beautiful addition
  to his growing portfolio.

One day, he muses,
  he'll have enough pieces
  for an exclusive gallery showing.

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
Dorn, by Katherine Dinger
100 words

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A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Nomadic Prince
    October 8
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    um... sadistic painters, we'll see


  • Tinselpool
    August 20

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    Congrats on your gold, silver, and three honorable mentions!

    I loved how you combined art with dark and bloodlust, but the dark part wasn't very emphasized, it seemed to me. Anyways, here's my favorite part:

    A faceless corpse
    served as his palette,
    providing more than ample amounts
    of fresh, thick crimson...
    Each strike of his hammer
    a brushstroke ~
    lush, red patterns
    upon a textured whitewall canvas.

    Very nice! Overall great write.

    Keep writing,

    Claire


  • StarOfDreams23
    August 20

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    Very good

    This piece was very blood lusted and very dark. The words suck you in and won't spit you back out till your finished reading it! Great write! Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Nom de Plume
    July 5

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    theres always method to madness nice gripping tale mate, wish you luck
    cheers


  • Paloszoo gold member
    July 4

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    Beautiful metaphors throughout. Imagery was chilling and beautifully dark! Well done! Thanks for entering my rounds contest and for showing your work here. It's a pleasure reading it!


  • Reanna Eryn
    March 16
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    Scary. Lovely indeed.


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    February 25

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    How... terrifying. In a good way! WELL DONE! Thankyou for entering this piece, and good luck!

    ~*~DramaQueen469~*~


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    February 20

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    this reminded me of a piece i wrote called mrs. taxidermist. yours however is better and far more eerie than mine. i enjoyed this piece well done.
    thank you for entering my contest.

    -deadly


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 18

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    Excellent, haunting imagery, the end made me shiver! I love this kind of twisted violence.
    The large font sort of added to the feel of precise messiness, I like that as well. Thank you for the entry, I really like this!
    -Lena


  • Ratfink
    February 2

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    That was a great read! This is probably one of the best dark poem I've read. You work the words really well and it flows great while also painting (haha) a great picture in your mind. I absolutely love it. Keep up the writing and good luck in the contest.


  • Luciferschild
    January 28

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    im glad i started this contest, i did not expect the first entry to be this good but wow, thank you for entering ill take many looks at this poem in the future.


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    December 11, 2008
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    this one is slightly eerie with a DEFINITE touch of the macabre


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    December 10, 2008

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    I agree with my cohost that this has excellent imagery, I loved it and the picture was great too.

    Thanks for entering and good luck.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • LadyDementia gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    Now thats my kind of art! The imagery is quite vivid. Very nicely penned. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    December 8, 2008
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    This has BEAUTIFUL imagery! Well done!


  • ageofdarkpoets
    October 21, 2008

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    Excellent write. I loved it. What can I say except that I enjoy dark and murderous. This piece is more then worthy for Broken Dreams. I look forward to reading much more of your work soon


  • JinSays gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Why do I suddenly hear gobblins cackling in the background? Gee, can we say CREEEEEEPY?
    YIKES
    I'm ascared of this guy, yet, I bet I'd find him in a room full of people..sure enough.
    Well written, well formed character, this poem definitely gave me the heebie-geebies.
    Best wishes to you, and remind me never to make you angry. .
    jin


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    the imagery here is beyond words.. most definitely vivid, I can tell you.. good thing I don't get grossed out that easily or I'd be not feeling to good right about now. this poem is a masterpiece all by itself. I absolutely love it.. I would love to see his gallery.. so does that mean I'm a sick & twisted individual or perhaps something isn't right upstairs. I can sit and watch Dr G Medical Examiner while eating my dinner. and it doesn't bother me. but yet I'm afraid of the dark.. go figure doesn't make any sense does it??

    good luck my guardian angel, though I must say I would give this gold.

    kat
    s x infinity


  • Yy13
    October 2, 2008
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    Yikes!


  • Soft-Rain
    October 2, 2008

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    Umm well a total horrifing tale but hide under the covers good!

    Love you
    ~Lisa~

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