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Paraphrasology Prayer

Before you're laying down to sleep,
where you wish upon a star,
pray the Lord, your soul to keep,
makes no difference who you are.

Anything your heart desires,
when you awaken from sleep,
all your good dreams wil come true.
Thank the Lord, your soul did keep.

As you wish upon a star,
life through death does not forsake.
Makes no difference where you are,
for the Lord, your soul, will take.

Makes no difference who you are,
pray the Lord, your soul to keep.
When you wish upon your star,
before you're laying down to sleep.


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  • stylization
    October 9, 2008
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    This is sweet, and I like the rhyme. A nice take on a nursery rhyme. Thanks for entering.


    • plainoljoe
      October 10, 2008
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      Chaos, glad I lfted your spirit a little. As a prayer and song combined, the message here deserves pratcice by all

      Joe


  • Wolfdog silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine take off on an old children's prayer. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one.


    • plainoljoe
      October 10, 2008
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      Clovis, what looked like an impossible challange came so easy as I combined an inspiring Disney song and children's prayer. I'm here to share anytime you want

      Joe


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    What a beautiful inspirational poem
    for the Lord, your soul will take
    that would be my wish
    such aprecioul write
    beautifully done
    love the rhyme
    God bless you Joe...


    • plainoljoe
      October 1, 2008
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      Pisces, this a was really fun venture into a style I hope to set. By combining a children's prayer with a Disney song on inspiration, the repitiousness of lines take on an individual and combined lesson of both "When You Wish Upon a Star" and "Now I Lay Me Down to Sleep. Perhaps you have a take along the same lines

      Joe


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 1, 2008

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    Ah this is so sweet!!!! I love this gentle write!!! Yes The Lord watches and takes care of His loved ones through the night!!! This is very beautiful and well written!!! You did a fantabulous job!!! I LOVE IT!!


    • plainoljoe
      October 1, 2008

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      Jewel as I read the rough draft to co-workers, I was astounded at their amazement. What seemed impossible at first came so easy to me. How about an effort from you to do the same, and don't forget to send me the link

      Joe

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