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Heaven's Slumber




The night sleep eluded my eyes
you were there watching over me.
giving to me warming comfort
from heaven on high soothing me.

You were there watching over me,
filling my heart with tender love.
showing me that I'd be okay.
my eyes finally found slumber.

Giving to me warming comfort
sheilding me from today's heartaches.
helping me along life's hard road
your hand in mine along the way.

From heaven on high soothing me
my heart now knows you're always near
wrapping me gently in your love
together we'll walk hand in hand.



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Retourne

Each line eight syllables, the second line of verse one is the the first line of verse 2. The third line of verse one is the first line of verse three. The fourth line of verse one is the first line of verse four.

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  • penman gold member
    December 6, 2008
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    Excellent

    Aww, this is amazing and so very well done. Thank you for sharing.


  • Amera gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    I know exactly what this is about and you know I have the same thoughts about my Tim. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Desire gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    Wow~

    I don't believe I have tried this form but love how You presented this
    You make it seem so darn easy
    Oh My~
    Is there a form You have not tried
    Oy!~!
    Another treat to inhale
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Talent~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • sunshinegirl
      November 16, 2008
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      oh yes! there are many forms I have yet to try but do enjoy trying the new ones... And yes, this form is easy. ( I think anyways)...

      Love ya
  • Bob Fox
    October 14, 2008

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    Beliefs

    Such wonderfull belifs I do envy. For one to know that He is there wtching bover you seems so comforting> even I smiled dear poet.


  • storiesuntold
    October 9, 2008

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    Very nice write here

    Often you can see love within each person so given over the years we wear it for all to see . And in that blessing often reflect for others not so fortunate to
    be drawn to us in hope of us shedding some of our light upon them to show them the way


  • Amera gold member
    October 7, 2008
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    I love the Retourne and you took the form and used it so powerfully. This is strong, beautiful, emotional and perfectly penned. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 1, 2008

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    There you go again, writing these amazing masterpieces.
    You really blow my mind when you write in your fancy styles. This is the most beautiful poem. Your ending
    was so touching. I loved the whole thing.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

  • SueRee
    October 1, 2008

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    The cyclic writing emphasizes the soothing text. Crafted and measured while being gentle and easing us into calm. Thanks!

    . Rewarded 4


  • princess Jewelcat22
    October 1, 2008

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    Yes God always watches over us no matter what!!! This is lovley!!! Your words are so soothing and sweet!!! This is an incredible write!! Your words are beautiful!!! You have an amazing flow!!! Your background is perfect!!! I LOVE IT!!

  • faded dreams
    October 1, 2008
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    This is beautiful. I love the format, it really ties it all together. Well done!

    • sunshinegirl
      October 1, 2008
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      Thanks hon. This one is quite close to my heart, as it holds a deep personal meaning to me. Glad you enjoyed it.

  • Candy6
    October 1, 2008
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    Such a beautiful background and the poem.

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