And everything is sad
Today like yesterday-
The flood of pains
And the dream sets
In the black destiny.....
And better times
Don`t come, anymore,
No consolation......
And everything is sad
Today like yesterday-
Author notes
Piano=slow in italian
B/c I don`t know you I wrote about my own depression
A contest entry
- You never know.... by Cyanide Dreams.
1640 points, ended May 12, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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When living becomes merely existing, the color of the world fades away, and the days become black & white, bright, but dull, and the nights become pitch and ugly.
I'd give anything for a box of crayons somedays
Anyhell, excellent write.
I can imagine the listless, restless feeling of drifting through the mundane days in your words.
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I just realized how sad and angsty all my poems from the past were! They make me feel so vulnerable now.
I wonder why I haven't deleted them allready.
Anyway I love this poem because it's simple and perfectly describes the feeling of calm desilusion,when, after a nervwrecking period of stress and pain, nothing happen. Just a row of mundane days that never seams to end. -
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I like these past writes.
In some twisted kind of way, it feels better to know that there are people that know what somethings are like, and that the world isn't quite as empty as it makes you think sometimes.
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Title: 9/10
Originality: 9/10
Emotion: 8/10
Grammar/Spelling: 9/10
Flow/Structure: 8/10
Imagery: 9/10
Overall Use of Poetic Devices: 8/10
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Overall: 9/10
Totaling: 88/100
Wow, terrific job. So much said in so little. I really liked this piece. "Piano" is also Latin for soft, which I think kinda goes with this. It's so soft to read, yet, so dark. You can just see everything. Great job on this piece and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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Depressing write, sad and vividly dark. I love this.
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aww.. sad sad..
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forgot this
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its just not slow, its excruciatingly slow, represents the pain
i am sad today...i dont know why i am saying that. i am more disappointed, or maybe plain sad..so everything feels sad..
so i think i can relate to this.
Today like yesterday makes me think that it has happened before, and its like history is repeating itself.
and the dream sets in the black destiny. dream represents something we hope for, wish for, desire for.
black destiny is the circumstancies that take that away.
we keep waiting, but better times dont come, maybe we get tired and give up on waiting, there is no consolation now, not even in the wait.
And everything is sad, today like yesterday.
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