the skies are damp
lint washed to a meager gray
My cloven heart
slobbers at the canvas
My cloven heart
drooling upwardly
pools between the cumulus
as infantines play charades
with tiny marble cameras
Shuttering by ground
tiny marble lenses
filled with nursery dank
soul
In a frank turn of sunlight
my cloven heart
flowers into glistening
reflects the blooming
of balding marble
soul
My cloven heart is smiling
above a tarn of dim-lake
turquoise,
but no one else seems healed
so the curving of a mouth
seems bold
the porch of earth
creaks, it might be weepings
the skies are damp
soaked in depressant of
lachrymal pourings
still my coin heart
dribbles, unhealed smiles
make bored salt rings
of those caught aching
My cloven halves
slobber at the sky
so in love that it
has fallen beneath us
A contest entry
- puzzle pieces from the clay by unraveled.
700 points, ended October 18, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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whew ... glad i got the bronze and not you
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.. i mean glad you didn't get the bronze cuz you shoulda got thuh other ones instead ... i commented already on yer poem here and i think i barely got out of this one with my shirt on ... barely ... i mean, I think yer poem was actually more powerful than mine but mine was cuter
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eh it was an off night for me =P love is definately not my strong suit
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Really like that ending. There are a lot of good pieces in this contest, damn... love the repetition of cloven, although i have usually heard it in reference to devil imagery, and that makes me wonder if you imply some sort of satanic connection. or i could be completely looking too deep and you just like the word cloven.
hmm, what else, the title fits quite nicely, well done
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last stanza ... ... oh yeah .. this is just fine and dandy with me ... i like everything about it .. and the bored salt rings and the cloven halves with the marble soul somewhere in there just waiting ... dang dude this is really damned interesting to read ...
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Wow....that was a bit mystic but fricken good cause there could be so much said about it. i loved it cause people can interpret it how they see fit. Keep it up!
maggie
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