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Just there...

Make way here I come...
Toiling,casting
Little further
we are sure
there...

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Lets get moving...

A contest entry

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 1, 2008

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    the ending seems off to me, but i do like it, i just don't really get it, you did a wonderful job, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Lavender Butterfly gold member
    October 1, 2008
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    Creatively grasping... x