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You Never Died

Everytime I look back
There'll be nothing I lack.
Everytime I think about you
I'll always be true.

Rest in peace,
Your memories will never cease.

I know
You're watching over me,
Staring at my pride.
I know
You won't be angry,
So please, please don't cry.

We'll never be far apart
Because you're always alive in my heart.

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  • Symphony
    February 7

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    There was one part of this that sprang out and grabbed my attention with a firm hold;

    "Rest in peace,
    You're memories will never cease."

    How true is that? So very very true, that just because someone has passed on doesn't mean that they are gone - they'll live FOREVER in our memories!

    Thank you for entering


  • gigglesalot
    December 11, 2008
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    nice job in flow and verse. good luck in the contest

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    ice job here, it's an old story ,,, this you'll always be in my heart and then running like rabbits. I'm off of men at the moment you have to pardon me

  • vampedvixen
    November 4, 2008
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    Awwww.. so sweet. Very beautiful. It made me cry a little.


  • sheltered
    October 16, 2008
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    this made me smile
    showed vulnerability


  • AboveApathy
    October 12, 2008

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    i love 'staring at my pride'.
    one grammar error: "YOUR memories will never cease"
    great write!
    luck and love,
    wesley.


  • teardrop gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    I am sorry for your loss. Grief is the only emotion and pain that people can actually die from a broken heart.

    I wish you a very gentle healing and good luck in the contest.


    • VerminVomit
      October 6, 2008
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      its not my loss, its other peoples losses
      well, either way its still sad


  • TwiztidMaggot
    October 5, 2008

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    This is very good. You did a wonderfulo job writing this!!! I love it! Thanks for your entry! Keep up your amazing work! Best of luck.

    CrimsonViper (Midoriko)


  • Shuberth
    October 1, 2008
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    Nice!

    sad But Nice!


  • nichtmich silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    Beautiful and filled with love and hope. Only one suggest, 6th line, decease should be cease The poem flows well and has a good message.

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