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You Are My Sweetest Downfall

Your strength was about you, I was the source.
I needed you to watch the stars with me.
I don't know when I began to realize
that those stars were just old light.
You are my sweetest downfall.
We didn't make history,
I loved you, my first.
The magic slipped beneath our fingers,
And when the beauty of what was shone bright,
we covered our eyes.
You are my sweetest downfall.

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  • littleBritain
    October 1, 2008

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    oooh i like it, key lines from the song, combined with a tragically beautiful outlook, placed together in seemingly hap-hazard fragments.
    well constructed and thank you for entering