*Thump-Thump.*
My breath escapes in a quick gasp while
The world falls like stars at sunrise,
Creating a burning portrait of beauty.
The darkness of uncertainty is washed away
Like a great flood that purged dust
From a deadened field of wilted poppies.
My face burns red
With your intense gaze. I feel
Cherished, standing tall
Like the Great Pyramids on
Blazing Egyptian sands.
And when my eyes shut
For a night of slumber
You fill my mind with security
I am safe in this calm sanctuary.
Your strength in spirit clashes
With the softness of a gentleman
When velvet meets steel
Just enough Power,
Just enough Gentleness
Aye me.
I Love You.
Author notes
Written after a long absence of inspiration. Guess I found it. =]
A contest entry
- Hello there... by new born.
625 points, ended November 28, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Something thrown together...
Comments
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Great write! I love it. I love you descriptions and comparisons.
"...falls like stars at sunrise,
Creating a burning portrait of beauty."
"...washed away
Like a great flood that purged dust
From a deadened field of wilted poppies."
"...Cherished, standing tall
Like the Great Pyramids on
Blazing Egyptian sands."
Keep writting.
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I, of course, love anything that references Egypt in general... and this piece was lovely.
"The darkness of uncertainty is washed away
Like a great flood that purged dust
From a deadened field of wilted poppies."
This was my favourite verse though, I just loved the image.
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Oh this is wonderful! Let me see, what is my favorite part...I am torn between the first, third and fifth. It is all so wonderful, a true description of how it feels to fall in love the first time. Very nicely penned!
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I think this is nice. I like the pyramid reference.
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