artistic vision
shimmers
behind the flat surfaces
of a grey-walled city
innocuous childhood motifs
silently reach out
to wrench you
down
to the swirling
depths
of a three-dimensional
imagination
Author notes
Inspired by 'street-art' by Julian Beever 
you can view this picture through the contest link!
A contest entry
- Trick Of The Eye by polly filla.
875 points, ended October 7, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive criticism is always welcome!
Comments
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This is an effective piece that manages to capture the picture. I love the use of innocuous too.
Sha
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nice contrasts here - flat surfaces and three-dimensional imagination as well as the innocuous childhood motifs and swirling depths.
Congrats on your gold trophy. -
Congratulations on using the word innocuous in a poem to describe a batman picture.
Also congratulations on winning Pollys contest.
It is a worthy write.
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It ended so suddenly, well before I could tell where you were going. You described the awe and the spectacle well and your language was vivid. Cheers
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Your diction is incredible!
Impressive. Really. Either you are very close friends with a thesaurus or you studied the dictionary every day since early chidlhood. LOL.
This is a beautiful poem, just like the others I read.
There is something about your poetry that stills the soul --- it is so stunning, yet so gentle. Much like a waterfall - there's so much going on, swirling beneath the surface, rushing along in the currents --- yet it feels so peaceful and majestic, it quiets even the most ... unquiet mind (like mine).
You have true talent. It feels so genuine and natural, too - not forced or fake.
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I like this; even though you've explained the image, you've twisted it to show something else; something about you
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Excellent observation and description of the artistic endeavors of Julian Beever, a truly gifted street artist. Very well done!
Dennis
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