a helicopter lands--
birds scatter
from the meadow
Andrew Hide
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Written January 24th, 2004
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I can visualize this very clearly. It's simple yet very sweetly penned.
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yes, niic juxtaposition of down and up, landing and rise to flight... PK
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I could hear the hum of the blades. This is simple, and as mushika said it is complete in drawing forth a vivid image and implanting it into the readers mind.
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I love this, it does everything a short poem of this kind can and should do. Challenges the reader with a complexity that belies its length- offers an original and thoughtful view of the world with sharp concrete images that evoke a symmetrical but contrasting (in movement and form)picture.
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Excellent
Hi Andrew:
Great visuals in this piece. As you know, I enjoy short, but to the point pieces. Excellent! I really like the title as well. It gives the piece full meaning. Thanks for Flight Patterns. Bill -
My question is "will the birds return", "will the meadow ever be the same"....Again your seed has been planted. Very nice write, thank you..........peace abel
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Perfect poem ... who is imitating whom?
Thank you, Andrew - your poetry is becoming more refined day by day ... HUGS
Myra
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i like the mix of man and nature in this. Any self respecting bird would steer clear of those noisy beasts. Great write. Susan
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those are loud verocious planes that would scare off any
critter in the meadows and the plains....
cheers
Tamara -
Awfull truth
Remembers me of a friend 35 years ago saying one day it will be so D.. busy in the air that sparrows will decide to go walking. how far away will that day be? Twice a day moments with at least 15 airplanes above and on that clear days that 15 % of that sky is covered with those gasses. This poem makes us aware what we are doing to our nature. So visable, I don't like this poem for that, For stealing the romance we like to feel in poems. Therefore welldone.
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Perhaps it's different locales and different perspectives, but there are plenty of meadows around here, plenty of birds, and it would be a rare sight indeed if a helicopter landed. About the only ones seen here are the medical transports that occasionally visit the local clinic.
For me, this short little verse painted pictures of a time long ago where the serenity of the meadows still exist, but this present picture is offering previews of a not-to-distant future where modern life absorbs the country scene...and it carries way significant overtones. Thanks for the thoughts it inspired.
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Andrew.Great word picture.I hope that the birds were smart enough to avoid the helicopter rotor.
In the meadow
Whirlybird lands
Birds whirl away.
Bill -
True...that's an interesting observation. Short, but it brings many things to mind. There's the power of the haiku for you.
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Poor meadow, I mean, it is getting destroyed by the weight of the helicopter, who cares about the birds, there are plenty around, but, meadows are rare and far-between
A lovely piece here.
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