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Like the Forbiden Dove

You always said
You will always love
All the things in my head
Like the forbiden dove
While we layed in my bed
And how it fell from above
And that you wrote it to be read
But what you never thought of
Was that it was dead.

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 14, 2008

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    well..nice description of the heart and its expereices as well..heartfelt emotions you made here to forma poem..well done...


  • Poetess12
    October 1, 2008
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    This is a good write. It's short and yet it says so much.

    Thanks for your entry.