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Tongue got your cat?

ah, yes, the aroma... intoxicating!
the folds, major and minor
adequately seasoned
with perfect amounts of salinity
cause shivers to emanate from glistening lips
whilst tongue dances feverishly with beavers
in tiny circles widening, widening
in the midst of a dew covered forest

incessant tremors
litter facial features
nose, mouth, and chin
shining...
lost in a gluttonous symphony
of a cannibalized feast
a feeding frenzy ensues
suction, pressure
inhale, exhale
as a sliver of ice
is gently inserted
between the folds

the chill of it
the warmth
the friction
the constant smooth inward glide
nibble, nibble, nibble

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  • a n e s t h e s ia
    October 14, 2008
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    Ooooh.. rich write. I love this.. So damn tasty. I want to lick the page clean.


  • kyssmi
    October 14, 2008

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    omy goodnesss....thats was desciptive....wow i have to agree that title was perfect...and the words well....i think you said it all...good job sir

    • tombruize
      October 14, 2008
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      Thank you

      I appreciate the kind words, sweety... I tried.


  • Patpowers
    October 12, 2008

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    Nice job again Tom. The title certainly grabbed my attention. THANKS for a poem that rocks!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    L.O.L.

    Love this! l.o.l. and the title? very clever! you got
    yourself a shiny waiting for ya on this i would say!

    • tombruize
      October 7, 2008
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      Thank you

      I appreciate the compliment, Swan. Thanks again


  • Levesta gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    HOT WRITE LOVE

    • tombruize
      October 2, 2008
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      Thank you for the comment

      I am glad you like it... Thanks for stopping by and reading my attempt.


  • michichoeret
    October 1, 2008
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    wow

    great write
    beautiful wording

    really should try your ice idea sometime


    • tombruize
      October 1, 2008
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      Thank you

      I appreciate the comment... You SHOULD definitely try the ice. I call it Ice torture...


  • XMISERABLExHAVOCx
    October 1, 2008
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    wow... i sure as hell wish my boyfriend was like you!


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    you definitely know your dish...gastronimically . I knew you would join this contest.

    This is very good!!! well descriptive.


    • tombruize
      September 30, 2008
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      Oh you KNEW I would enter, huh? Hmm? I wonder why is that? Thanks for the comment. Hey, I have a healthy appetite. What can I say?


      • ariazephyrzoe gold member
        September 30, 2008
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        well it has to do with you being the diner? and of course Pepsi and ice cube... I hope it does answer that...and why do you need to wonder? hmmm


  • ratkos
    September 30, 2008
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    forgot smileys you definately deserve smileys!


  • ratkos
    September 30, 2008

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    how descriptive you are. wish i knew somebody with the same fetish. your words were definately stimulating!


    • tombruize
      September 30, 2008
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      Every male aches to be nourished by the nectar of the Gods... Some are just still in a state of boyhood and don't understand nature's true call. LOL Thanks again...


  • cre8tiv-writer
    September 30, 2008

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    Incredible!!! Insanely sexy!! This is stimulating from the vocabulary to the descriptions used...great job!!

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