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Spotlight, check.
Yeah, I want to be the star
(((Full-out jazz hands,
Pirouetting, spotting on the sky)))
And I want to shine
For him.
I want to be the flash bulb
Of the camera,
Warm between his hands,
The light of the epiphany
Glowing in his pants.

I’m pure Broadway,
Not community standard!
(((Too much lipstick
And not enough base
On a poorly lit stage,
But it’s not a dead end.
Really, momma, he’s not.)))

Another day, another show,
Climb in the van and go,
’Cause this audition’s
Gonna put us on the maps.
It looks like a seedy bar,
But it’s a staircase to Heaven.
(((Adrenaline rush
Between caffeine kicks.
Show the man your fan kicks.
Smile wider, yeah,
Let those toes and hopes
Touch the sky.)))

Yeah, we’re the best,
A cabaret, one lucky shot
From a penthouse
Instead of a sofa
In his buddy’s apartment.
It's all part of his plan -
You just can't rush art.
He whispers warm truths
From his bottle of beer,
Says we harmonize real good.
We’re the couple of the year,
Yeah, I’m his lucky star.

Author notes

MessOfADreamer here.
I thought I would play with tone and form some with this piece.
For this poem, I used option two, and the phrase "adrenaline rush between caffeine kicks." I also got a bit of inspiration from "I Remember How Those Boys Could Dance" from the Carrie musical, as per option four.
The poem was mostly inspired by the phrase "under messy heaps of charades & lousy pretend games," though I ended up not actually using it in the poem itself.
(Both phrases courtesy of checkmate.)

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  • Walk-Free
    October 9, 2008
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    congruatulations on making it to the next round!

    here's the link of the last contest. please do enter because we have fallen in love with your poems (:

    http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2423543#


  • Beauty Of Silence
    October 1, 2008

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    woot!

    some creative juices flowing here it seems! i like this, it was different and stood out! brilliant metaphors, wonderful write. only, you could have spilt this up into stanzas. but anyhoo, this was still a great poem! keep penning

    • MessOfADreamer
      October 2, 2008
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      Mmhmm, I was trying to figure out where to split it. I did, and I think I'm happy with it, but it could change.

      Thanks!

  • Walk-Free
    September 30, 2008

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    "I’m pure Broadway,
    Not community standard!"

    edgy and creative. i enjoyed reading this.

    best of luck

    please put your username in your AN

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