As the autumn whisper began so slow
The Day went by,and the moon began to glow
giving every man another ray of hope
to help him down life's steep slope
Extortion of all emotions so deep and clear
remains in the hands of a frightful tear
That trickles down my cheek so easy and blue
and knows how to hurt one's feelings so true
Feeling so low I consent to my space
only to diversify between tears and my face
I unleash a feeling of unfulfilment
controlling its every problem & sediment
To replace pain with hope and dreams
confides in endless streams
of stress and realisation
& how the idea of hope creates a sensation
To conquer expectations is to conquer all stress
to forgive and forget and clean up your own mess
is quite the challenge for life's new guests
who in the business of life , love does invest
Author notes
Stanza 1
It refers to the clouds rain in the form of a person's tear
--->steep slope - refers to the will power of a person in context to controling their own emotions
--->burden - refers to how sadness makes one feel depressed and alone.
Stanza 2
It refers to how pian extorts all emotions of happiness only bcoz a tear trickles down someone's cheek and hurts the indirect one.
Stanza 3
It refers to how a person consents to being alone due to his depression and pain
and how he (generalising) controls to hold back his tears .
Stanza 4
It refers to how pain and stress causes one to depend on hope
& how people try to console themselves with expectations
Stanza 5
It refers how expectations can lead to sorrow
and also refers to on how to conquer it !
A contest entry
- Bring Me Hope... by PerfectImperfection.
900 points, ended October 14, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do u think of my poem ?
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A very well expressed piece of thought penned here. Nice use of imagery, depth, and emotion throughout - with a clear descriptive of intention to help any who stray in thought. Nicely done! Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Very good poem here
Indeed as we see our life is often much different than what is seen through others eyes . We are our worst critigues on things we have done wrong and right .Yet we must understand where we are comeing from on our own judgment in order to see why others feel the way they do about us . Mirrored images can one stand in front of a mirror and look themselves in the eye and tell themselves a lie watch your expression for when you know your doing wrong no excuse will fix it only realizing the truth and getting oneself true will bring forth the true love of life
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thank u soo much friend for ur lovely comment!!!!
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This is an amazing write and I love how you've explained it in you AN... well done. it should have won a trophy. keep writing, you're really good.
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I loved the rhyming, you do it well.
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