words born
from hearts
danced
from childhood
singular voices
sang two souls
unique
yet barely
distinguishable
where makes
a woman
a man
meet
turned to entwine
stranded
white
blue
threads into
colourless netting
a catch of full sun
our light
travelled to arc
return
to itself in seeking
and found to be one.
A contest entry
- twist by tara wilson.
2250 points, ended October 16, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Welcome any sincere response and critique
Comments
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a good piece of poetry, childhood sweethearts i think of here, lives wrapped together by fate's ribbons, and time nurtures love with a gentle smile.
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I get such a sense of this poem that the two were entwined long before meeting...and found that in each other...such a lovely poem, your voice is soft & very tender here, the mood matches the words/subject perfectly....thanks so much for entering the contest
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Yes..this is the destiny revealed within few words..and touched and told the story of this life..well done ..my friend..
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stranded
white
blue
threads into
colourless netting
a catch of full sun
. . .and the story picks up from the beginning, to go through the motions all over again. Magical in it's simplicity. Best wishes,
jin
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and it moves on and on and on... each twist showing the way to total peace and love.... travelling on light
beautimous
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... please... let it be just like that
x
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lovely. i think you created
something very beautiful for
Tara to read - i think your
heart is like a big balloon
floating above us all.
Love, Lane
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... hope I can contain it, rather than just floating away.
Thank you for your kind and generous words Lane
Sol
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"stranded white blue threads"...I love the image this brings to my mind...like clouds and sky, sea and foam, natural weaving of two parts of the One...And the title, "Entwined" is more effective than a 'twist', which would seem artificial...Lovely write; I hope it wins for you. Peace always, my Brother Sun...Rhonda
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I love what you see in the 'white and blue'... I also thought of the white as 'female'- angelic, pure, radiant, beauty, receptive and 'male'- infinity, vision, seeking, active... If that isn't stretching things too far, just seemed appropriate.
Thank you
Sol
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This is so beautiful. I love this...very much.X
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Thank you... I'm so glad you do
X
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And love reaches into two hearts to create a beautiful piece of poetry. Nicely penned poet.
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Much thanks to you Bob.
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