How could I entertain such naivety?
Her raspberry lips are ripe for you.
I stand longing, willow wisps
Dancing about my moon-lit silhouette
She is a kaleidoscope
Graceful perfection unencumbered
Flitting through your fantasia
A destiny I cannot withstand
I am the amorous damsel
Lost in the shadows, an apparition
A clandestine plight
A watercolor fading through time
A chasm lies between you and I
Your spearmint lovely owns you
As time spins my life forward
Your surreality stays as that
Our polarity could not be more vast
I am quintessential
As you are ephemeral
Yet quixotic, I lay wait in our window.
My insatiable affection withstands
As memories re-live, I wait
For your unencumbered form to appear
Mortality faced with infinite youth
Author notes
Written by petalblue2
I chose to combine the picture of Wendy looking for Peter with the word bank.
A contest entry
- & this is love? by Kiss the girl--x.
525 points, ended October 19, 2008, 26 entries
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I truly enjoyed this piece and I am so glad I stopped by. I will be back to read more of your work. Blessing.d
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Thank you for reading!
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You really are an amzing writer, this is simply brilliant, i cant really decide my favourite part the whole thing is magnificent, but the second to last stanza is amazing
Our polarity could not be more vast
I am quintessential
As you are ephemeral
Yet quixotic, I lay wait in our window.
SIMPLY BRILLIANT!!!!!
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'She is a kaleidoscope
Graceful perfection unencumbered
Flitting through your fantasia
A destiny I cannot withstand'
I love that stanza, it's so so beautiful.
this all went so well together, I especially loved how you fitted it with the background. It's really pretty.
thanks for entering
♥
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Beautiful
An excellent write, containing a whole lot more than it tells and shows. Deserving
Vito
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Good write here
I so try to help the young people understand that the most popular arent the ones who are most loved or respected .For they are toys of the time yet a person that respects themselves and cares for the reputation of their boduies in time in the long run are the ones who gets the true love and respect for life .You hang in there and watch from the side and you will see so many seeming like their life is the best fall along the way .Be true to yourself and fly
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This is a sensational write,very graceful, I love the imagry you created here, especially the line she is a kaleidoscope. I know I say it often, but your words dance around and merge into each other, as if they are soulmates, once again you have given this word junkie a tasety treat, you are one of the few poets i know who can speak of romance without it becoming just another poem that is then forgotton, you take the most popular of all topics and turn it into something unique, you have a style all your own thanks so much for sharing take care, littlefishone(Theresa).
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Once again, thank you for your heart felt comments. I am really glad you enjoyed this piece, I think it is my favorite. This one was a joy to write. I always wish I could write more whimsical ones for my kids though. I should read them some of yours, especially the ferdinand one! Much love, Kelly
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This is an interesting piece, however the word bank options do seem a bit forced. Thoughtful within its emotion expressed, a sense of longing - to be found... Thank you for your entry & Best wishes in the contest!
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Super! What a way with words you have. Such a cultured and eloquent poem, it's suitable for framing.
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Yet another pathos invoking write Petal. I found the third stanza to be especially moving - "I am the amorous damsel
Lost in the shadows, an apparition
A clandestine plight
A watercolor fading through time.." In my opinion - A watercolor seems as thou it outta be pluralized.
Strong imagery and great use of language throughout, thou the last two stanzas read weighted.. I dunno, maybe lose "in my world" simply reading "I am quintessential, as you are ephemeral". alas perceptions vary based upon each individuality. Wonderful write, hope this is deemed helpful and not intrusive. Look forward to reading more of your intriquing writes.
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Wow!
I truly enjoyed reading your poem. I have to say my favorite stanza is the first. There was such lovely imagery and alliteration throughout the entire poem. Well written I say! Bravo!
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Thank you so much for your comment!
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Beautiful.
The sweet words and intense imagery was amazing!
I've already read it twice!
You should do wonderfully in the contest!
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Thank you for your comments!
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Her raspberry lips are ripe for you.
I stand longing, willow wisps
Dancing about my moon-lit silhouette
lovely imagery.
and alliteration.
good luck!
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