Lower your lashes, sink in destiny’s prompt
inhale vibrations, a magnetic pulse
to caress your senses
Remain thus, trust, believe
feel, energies soak your essence
mark time not, hold, wait
Knowledge prevails, travel veins of perception
enhanced visions to remark upon, adhere
A gift of the given moment, diamonds
illuminate shining armor beneath dust
A contest entry
- Give Me A Reason by Jasmine Rayne.
1750 points, ended October 14, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Your poetry speaks to me; lifts me up from a lower perspective.
"Lower your lashes, sink in destiny’s prompt
inhale vibrations, a magnetic pulse
to caress your senses"
Absolutely magnetic as it states. I can't tear my eyes from this opening stanza. Your words sink into me and capture my soul. They are beautiful.
"Remain thus, trust, believe
feel, energies soak your essence
mark time not, hold, wait"
I like where you chose to pause the flow. It makes it all more staccato and interesting. As if the poem has a definite beat.
"A gift of the given moment, diamonds
illuminate shining armor beneath dust"
I love this last line. That feeling that what's presently occurring is only temporary, and there are "diamonds" waiting to be discovered. :] Your poem has definitely done the job of uplifting me. Thank you so very much for your beautifully outstanding entry.
-Lily♥ -
This is just so eternally beautiful, you capture an essence of something I can't quite describe yet. Best to you in the contest
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