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Mind

Would you kindly
Take the gun to arms
In these wars on the homeland

Take in for yourself
My words and uttered
In depth commands
That I give you

"A man chooses.
A slave obeys."

As one you are vulnerable
Unless you catch on soon
That your mind has been
Sabotaged

What kind of killer are you?
What have you become?
Would you kindly answer?

Such a simple phrase
Has such a powerful influence
On the mind

Those that know of its secrets
Have unlimited power
Against even the greatest of enemies

For once I have you
Alone
Afraid
Fearful of your own life

It is then I ask you

"Would you kindly?"

And thus you are mine
You obey

You become my puppet
And I the master

And in the dark you will lay down
Curled in a small ball
Ashamed
As your own mind walks out on you

So would you kindly tell me?
What kind of killer are you?
Or can you become?

Would you kindly show me?

"A man chooses.
A slave obeys."

Author notes

Inspired by "Bioshock" for PC and Xbox 360

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  • word20dragon
    November 24, 2008

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    Great Write

    I like this I see someone falling in love, being singal they are free but in loving another they become a slave that kills, each becoming a slave to one another for each others happiness, Each becoming killers of each other and of the self so we can fit into the others world we kill our old habbits and selfishness, Killing the other person by forcing are will on them at times, This is a great write with some great messages and meanings


  • myrataal silver member
    October 13, 2008

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    I'd love to answer!

    The only weapon fair in this war, is LOVE!

    YAY.

    Now see? It is not that abstract!
    Love
    Myra


  • Emberess
    October 1, 2008

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    I guess I need to know the game to understand the poem, but even though I didn't understand it I thought it was a good write. Creepy and mesmerizing.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 1, 2008

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    i have never planned that game but i hear good thing,s you know this is an amazing poem that you have done here, keep it flowing


  • Deathless1
    October 1, 2008

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    you were just talking about that last night, and the first thing i read this morning is more about this damn game.

    i now know you love it more than any thing els in this world.lol


  • dabpunx
    September 30, 2008
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    i really find this a very poignant reflection of reality even though it was inspired by a game.

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