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High Praise

High praise to our redemptive Lord
who leads us through in grace
and asks us, one to one restored,
in searching, seek His face.

Christ leads to shore each other up
when garnered one by one,
to His great calling's wondrous hope:
we can but labour on!

The smiles which He on us bestows
we can but Him approve;
God's grace in every voice now flows
in clearest notes of love.

As one we speak and sing the same
and heartily agree;
first focussed all through Jesus' name
in Heavenly harmony.

We all enjoy our smiles as one,
a mutual trust that heals;
a trust that robs the faithless fun,
yet every Christian feels.

Now, if our fellowship on Earth
in Jesus is so sweet,
then Heaven's prize, beyond our worth,
lies at His feet, to greet.

 

 

Copyright. All rights reserved. Ron Wiseman.  Smile

Author notes

I believe the Gospels bring good news that is essentially happiness wherever two or three are gathered together in his name. Sight rhyme used authoritatively. 

 

[For those who wish, this poem may be sung to W Jones's 'Newington' tune. ] 

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  • Samplette gold member
    October 3, 2008
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    A beautiful write. Uplifting, and definitely brings a smile. The rhyme is pretty good here, except for the third stanza. "approve" and "love" may be likely spelled, but not even a near rhyme. Still, it has nice rhythm and good flow otherwise. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


    • Lyndon gold member
      October 4, 2008
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      Lots of great poets did not shy from sight rhymes!

      Alfred, Lord Tennyson, no less in "Ring Out, Wild Bells",
      uses it two or three times; eg:
      "Ring out false pride in place of blood,
      Ring in the common love of good."

      You said "Any Form".



      • Samplette gold member
        October 4, 2008

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        I am aware of that. In this piece it took away from your flow a bit, but no problem. Just giving my opinion.

    • Lyndon gold member
      October 3, 2008
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      Thanks Sam

      However, Sight Rhyme is used very much as one kind of rhyme, especially in hymns, but not only in hymns and has been used by most famous OldPoetry poets [from Shakespeare to Charles Wesley to Ralph Vaughan Williams] who rhymed their verse. Also, sight rhyme is used in free verse for effect by well-known contemporary writers. As such, it is an acceptable device, deliberately used, and not erroneous unless a contest holder stipulates otherwise. Ron.
      http://www.writing-world.com/poetry/whose.shtml

      "The Sound of Rhyme. Not all rhyme means words that sound the same. But when they do, it is called a perfect rhyme. The perfect rhyme occurs when you use the words "honey/funny" or "mine/fine." The perfect rhyme is also called a sound rhyme.

      However, a near rhyme is when you have words put together in your rhyme scheme that sound nearly the same, such as with the words "taut/sat." This is also called a slanted rhyme. An alternative to the near rhyme is the sight rhyme (with words like "blood" and "good"), which is also called a visual rhyme."

      A famous Christmas carol has this verse:

      "Though an Infant now we view Him,
      He shall fill His Father’s /throne/,
      Gather all the nations to Him;
      Every knee shall then bow /down/":

      Slant or consonantal rhyme in this case.

      http://www.cyberhymnal.org/htm/a/f/afrglory.htm


      • Samplette gold member
        October 4, 2008
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        Sorry you were offended..just seemed out of place for the rest of the piece. Still a beautiful write..

        • Lyndon gold member
          October 4, 2008
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          No ... not offended in the least.

          However, I wanted you to know at this place that I knew what I was doing with my rhymes there.
          Whether I was successful is your call and I truly accept that.


  • MargaretG
    October 1, 2008

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    Faithful

    This is the message that Christ died to give us - we are here together for a purpose, which is to help and to be helped. We learn this from good people around us in Christ's name, or at his feet in scriptures. Each stanza you say in it a different way, "fellowship on Earth", bravo. I like the ballad meter and the rhymes are musical. I hope this can be sung in your church and others.

    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Hello Margaret.

      It is not for me to "push" the song in any church. I guess it will be looked upon favourably somehow, somewhere, sometime.
      But I think that you liked it a bit and I am thankful. Ron.


  • Vickie J
    September 30, 2008

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    The Gospel does mean "Good News" and good news does make you smile. Fellowshipping around His word opens the door to joy that's contagious-I think our God loves to laugh and just have good ol' belly roars-He invented laughter-he's gotta be able to do it best. At the thought of that, nothing could make me smile bigger. Best wishes in the contest!

    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Well, yes ...

      This is the point of Christ's mission: to banish misery even in spite of suffering or to work at banishing misery. . Thank you, Vicki.


  • Melodies
    September 30, 2008

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    A worshipful poem, written with a tender heart and loving mind. Beautiful and inspiring, reaching the reader with a smile.


    • Lyndon gold member
      September 30, 2008

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      I do thank you.

      I think it engenders more an inward than an outward smile.
      You are kind.

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