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sinking into a rising memory

Torrents of shallow adumbrations,
try to take flight,
lacing my mental referrences.

Reminding me of softly spoken lullabies
now collecting dust

except for the glistening of skin

against the droll velvet of trampled passions.

Always followed by that ever present
putrid silence; like gold left to rust.

Leaving behind the blemish of you.

Author notes

"Sinking into a rising memory" I used this because it reminds me of my titles which I used as well for inspiration.

Don't be silly.

Yink

Oh and I can't precisely think of a better title at the moment.

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  • dx d by me
    October 7, 2008

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    I like the movement in the title, sinking and rising, memories are like that, some ever present and comfortable, some erupt back to our conciousness, and some, yes some, are "like gold left to rust", only gold can tarnish, but never rust, and those 24 Karat memories we would rather not have around, seem to appreciate their own value. Like it. Geo


  • Yemassee gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Like the first one I read, this could be a poem written some months after that departure. When Disillusion sets in. When relationships die I have a feeling that putrefaction often sets in...has for me. Thank again, another one I enjoyed a lot.


  • FallingSideways silver member
    September 30, 2008

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    I think it turned out good and stop tugging your hair out. It is a good strong piece

  • FallingSideways silver member
    September 30, 2008
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    I see you...

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