Oh God
by the way let me describe you about my short story
a happy ending story
though, the stemming was not the cheerful one
since ,then ,I was a baby
not smart to recognize you
to assimilate you
later, when I was a grown up man
then I could discover that it is you behind
the improvisational drama of this life
drawing a serene smile on my face
Oh God...
A contest entry
- Catch a Smile by Samplette.
1500 points, ended October 15, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow!!! this is fantastic... very well written, and that picture is amazing!!!! i really love your writing style, and the way the words jumped off the page and right into my little mind!!!!
your writing style is incredibly unique, i really have never read a style quite like it.. very good job
xx
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Wow!
What a pic! Perfect! The poem has a few grammatical gremlins in it, but that aside, it's heartfully penned, and that's blatantly obvious...
You always did know how to find such beautiful prompts and work them into expressions of art!
Cheers! And best of luck in the contest!
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I shared a smile but did you mean to assimilate to God rather to assimilate God?
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Any thoughts of our Father will bring a smile to my face and heart. A lovely write. Thank you for entering.
Sam
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I sort of feel this one as a plant growing...like a sunflower that follows the track of the sun as the day passes and bows its head in the evening...from your 'stemming' childhood to your 'grown up' manhood, you follow the path of the One and smile...beautiful write my friend. Best wishes in the contest and peace always, Rhonda
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I love the poem..and I hope you like the one I entered into your contest..anyway I can tell you wrote this soulfully..Avery nice write..See you soon and god bless Sarah
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Wow!! This is an amazing picture and a very lovely poem. In the first line 'by the way' I liked it, it's like you and God are two people talking casually.
The picture captured my attention, it's such a beauty. You took it?
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Oh, I love it! The first two lines "by the way let me describe you about my short story
a happy ending story" were a little awkward, but after reading the poem, I don't feel an express need to change anything. The picture is great! Did you take it?
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