Once the moon tuned me into a hairy vagina...
And I fucked the entired universe
because I didn't know any butter,
and than, one date I had a revelution.
It was the moon's fault, so I set out
to destruct the moon, but instead I
only succeeded in losening my new shoes,
and tearing my skirte, and muddying up
my requalification of up. So I cried,
and I cried, then I died, And I
Kyled myself, and blamered you and
the MOON, Why!?,
what did I eber do to you?
Author notes
This is called a pimple poem. Purposely written from the point of view of a person that believes they're a poet, but they aren't a poet, at all.
Written January 24th, 2004
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It's horrid, putrid, rancid, an abominable excuse for a poem! Reading it made me want to cry, and cry, and die, and blamer the moon and yell 'why?!'
This is an extraordinarily worthy entry. -
so i bearded my black lord with pudding
so he looked somewhat like cuba gooding
He turned in profile
and took aim, with style,
at Zodiac's face with his pud. DING! -
Oh, how many times have I read these poems? And how many comments are there below them telling them how fucking fantastic they are? I don't know which is worse, the person who thinks they write so well, or the ones who lie to them?
I was looking back at some of the crappy poems I have written recently, and wondering why nobody ever told me how bad they were. How will we grow if we nobody is honest with us? -
you're nutz! heh heh heh heh...This is like Pinky without the Brain Finding Forrester...Hott stuff! Thank you for sharing such a rockin' piece!
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you're nutz! heh heh heh heh...This is like Pinky without the Brain Finding Forrester...Hott stuff!
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that's classic. it's actually very, very funny. so much of angst poetry is pure bullshit, as you make this quite clear. great work.
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LOL.
I'm out of things to say , But I enjoyed this. I clicked by accident and I don't believe in wasting points...Unless it sucks. Which it does. But it's intentional. So it changed the entire perspective. Horrible piece. Might even be a good poem to the people who write like this , Which is entirely most of this site.
Oh and good luck in the contest!
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I love this. Absolutely. I feel the same way about the angsty stuff. But, I must add, I often disguise my angst poetry as humor.
That'll learn 'em. Well, anyway at least my angst poetry gets a few more comments when I say it's actually humor, oh well.
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That was great and it made me laugh. Great job.
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Very outspoken. Good poem.
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For my night in negro armor
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Me too.
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I love ventriloquism.
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And then da MoON answered
"FUCK OFF BITCH"
and i Cried more
And theN just sat there -
gotta say-this thrilled me...
haven't laughed so damn hard in some time('cept when I read anasuya's intro for this contest)..
so true...so true...
and so unafraid to admit it-amen brother
~jag~
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I like the word "entired". I may use it in a sentence shortly.
Uh oh.
I have a... "writing"... where I blame the moon.
I am ashamed. Pass the butter. -
Interesting, scary, bad
The moon being a hairy vagina, and fucking the universe was very creative. You have along way to go to make something as horrible as the other contestants! lol -
OH holy hell that was fucking ass fucking funny!
That ending had me ROLLIN', dude! This was a fine example of what is wrong with this site and in the poetic world in general, and as always you impress me even without trying...damn, you're good.
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I'm not sure if I should be impressed or very very skerred that you already HAD a poem like this.
Thank you for entering, and good luck in my contest!
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oh my fucking god
im actually laughing out loud
this is so fucking true
my only fear is that i might just be one of them -
You are very outspoken! I like it
I don't believe anyone should sugar coat shit! If you don't like then click onto the next page.
You Freakin' Rock
Chrissy
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Weird, and you couldn't find any Butter, eh? Have fun with that.
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hey, had to put your poem in an adult category, due to some of the content. we have children that cruise this site, and to prevent further parental complaints, we need to keep racy subject matter in the adult category. if you have comments or questions about this, please feel free to contact me via IM or email. again, i appologise for any inconvenience.
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Thanks for submitting this... I guess... Sure it's funny, but in all honesty this contest isn't about people who think they can write poetry and don't succeed in doing so... I'm not sure who this is directed at... Hopefully not me... Maybe I don't understand how you write your pieces...
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Hahahahaha, this is so funny. These poets are not just teens, some of them are well into adulthood. Hahahaha. This poem made no sense at all, the author's comments is what was truly profound.
Thanks for sharing.
Ja
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aw stop it you make me hate poets...leave the kids alone they all like it and are probably doing big take offs of our stuck up arty fart airy fairy stuff. each to their own and everything has a place. pimple poetry is a great term though very dersiory and elitist....i liked this poem and o liked the misspelling and i think it is one of your best works...a person who thinks they are a poet but they arent..you mean they cant use speech and they are being too dramatic emotional and pretentious well maybe they are just copying off us
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Would that include the grammatical errors as well there hun? Cuz, those are more than annoying, which, then again, also proves your point.
I hate poetry like this, it shows how ignorant and simple minded some people are, i can't stand teeny-bop angst poetry..it makes me want to puke and then, just because im so disgusted, save the chunks so i can eat it later...
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Dat old Devil Moon
She makes me into
Such a Goon
Got stains on me skirt
Got stains on me heart
oOh OoH I hurt
C..u..t..c..U..T
saw off my head
Oh yay! I'm dead.
thank SWEET JESUS Christ.
That's how it'd look in true pimple angst buttock style which you really can't write because you're too good and you just can't let yourself fall into that vile crack of self-pity and loathing. Either that or you COULD, but you don't wanna get the shoes dirty.
I wear steel toed boots all the time and I can go anywhere Man. And if they don't let me in I can kick down those doors of mediocrity and hang from the cross of black thoughts.
This poem was horrible. Sucked. But I thought your true feelings were portrayed most sweetly. Please just don't send me any more of those photos via email ... Sweet Jesus. -
lol hmm a slight dig at teenage angsty poems eh? well i'm 100% guilty of those, although i have to say yours is much better!! take care,x
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cool
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