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Death

Death is a Way of Life
Caused by Nature or a Knife

Death brings Tears full of Sarrow
Makes you Wish for a Tomarrow

Slow is the Recovery of the Loss
Like on a Tree the Development of Moss

When this Dark Fate falls upon you
Be ready to Start Anew

Author notes

I wrote this after my Grandmother died a year ago...I have experinced death alot and know how painful it is and this is why I wrote it!

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  • Ami
    July 31

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    Very deep sorry about your grandmother :[
    But this write was amazing
    I like personal writes best cause it seems like theres more emotion and its real that's how I always wrote and always will
    Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck

    -♥Amy♥


  • Cyanide Dreams
    April 3

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    I felt this poem told more than showed. However, I did like how deep it was. You have some spelling errors in here, like sorrow, and tomorrow. Also, I think the line "Makes you Wish for a Tomarrow" I think it would be more effective as "Makes you wish for a better tomorow". You were probably trying to keep with the whole "same syllable" thing and sometimes it's good to break that. These are all suggestions though. I like the flow and the rhyme though. Thanks for entering and good luck with the contest.

    Josh


  • marythepumpkin
    February 27
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    awesome, very deep

    i love this! i can definately relate to it. my uncle died last year. you are a really good writer


  • sanguigno
    February 11
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    i think its good but the end doesnt really fit in my mind

    thanks for entering!


  • BleedingBlackTears
    November 26, 2008
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    sarrow and tomarrow are spelt wrong. well done its honest


  • nono-footballic
    October 3, 2008
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    WOOOOW so well written
    love the comparisons


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    October 3, 2008

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    This is a very heartfelt poem that clearly shows your loss, but also the grief and survival through your words.

    In the fourth line, tomarrow should be tomorrow.

    Excellent use of the image and different coloured fonts.

    Welcome to Allpoetry
    I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask


  • Ima survivor
    October 2, 2008
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    <_<
    *rapes*
    I love this one. <33

  • Josephine Fredericks
    September 30, 2008

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    moving

    I find this moving and meaninful, may your great writing continue, thankyou for your comment by the way, I like in a way that the poem doesn't make much sense, but atleast you thought it was good, as I think this is great, keep it up, this is great work.

    from jo

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