Tick Tick Tick--
The time is passing
and my urges amassing.
I must do it again
to find relief and then,
I'll be at peace..
Tick Tick Tick--
The hour is late
and my compulsion can't wait
to victimize
and brutalize;
My demon soul to appease.
Tick Tick Tick--
Now, is the time
in my psychotic mind,
to kill again--
feel the thrill again
of my hormonal release.
Tick Tick Tick--
Who shall it be?
It doesn't matter to me.
It's only a thing
that happiness brings;
a new life to cease.
Tick Tick Tick--
I'm standing here,
knowing death is near.
It's approaching me
in the shadows, I see
its image cast--
It's here at last!
I attack from behind,
with one thing on my mind.
I'm the 'Angel of Death'!
I watch it struggle for breath
with fear in its eyes;
Muffled screams, that it cries,
then, all is still.
I performed my will--
Another kill--
My Sensual Thrill!
I am whole again;
Walk away and then,
I have to smile,
knowing all the while,
I will do it again;
It's just a matter of 'When'
and no need to know 'Who'!
Maybe, it's-----'YOU'!
Tick Tick Tick---
Author notes
A contest entry for:
Mystery and Imagination by knitonepearlone
*The Demented Mind of a Serial Killer (50 Lines used)
**Picture Artist is Erlend Mork
In a list
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt by Carolina Moon.
600 points, ended October 2, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Great imagery and suspence in this poem. Thanks for your entry
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A chilling piece here which certainly enters the realms of mystery and leaves the imagination running wild. The rhyme scheme enhances the eariness which lingers throughout, Thanks for entering. Do not respond please.
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THIS HAS TO BE GOLD!!!
Excellent
Wow---This piece is amazing!!
So tense and the suspenseful build up sends a shiver up my spine!
I admire how you use the term "It" to depersonalize
the victims---Amazing touch.
The title choice just adds to the suspense!
Love the rhyme scheme of this piece---very well structured and versed with flawless flow and meter..
Very, Very well done and this is Gold in my opinion!
Three clappies aren't nearly enough do do this piece justice.
All my best in the contest!
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Excellent
Such a powerful and well crafted poem for the picture. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wonderful! I love the repetition of the 'tick,tick,tick' This gives it a sense of anticipation.
A great dark take on the picture and I loved the rhyming.
katz
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Chilling write this one truly is. Good luck in your contest.
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Chilling!! There lurks some very troubled minds in this world!! Excellent write my friend!
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good luck. :]
and [everything i write is about me] -
Awesome darkness
Eerie sends a brutal message
Better not be me next !!!
Best wishes to you
Julie
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This is so eerie Al!!!! You actually gave me shivers as I was reading this. It's an awesome take on the prompt dear. Good luck.
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You really put an spine tingling tale to this pic.
A killers voice open up for us to hear his murderous thoughts!
"I am whole again;
walk away and then,
I have to smile,
knowing all the while,
I will do it again"
The need to kill over and over...OMG!!!
"I'm the angel of death
and watch it struggle for breath
with fear in its eyes;
Muffled screams, that it cries"
Loved the way you used "it" therefore depersonalizing a human.
"Tick Tick Tick...this guy is sick" Ha!
Great job on this pic and best of luck in this contest!
darlintlc
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A very good write. Eerie and haunting. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Vivid descriptives. Very nice rhythm. Nice use of repetition. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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