Don't ever forget the fluid feelings, her layers of pain,
thoughts only minuet and calculated, now drowned in rain,
their was a wealthy love once harbored deep inside,
now disemboweled and forgotten like trash cast aside,
i predict a memory today that floated like prayers,
one about precious toy diamond ring like anyone else cares,
A righteous victory over god, glory and country,
once everything but my self was defeated i was still hungry,
how could i ever forget a thing like snow spring,
the bodies touch as silent skin starts quivering,
to light a fire only her mind could inspire,
if i could only give up then my mind at ease to retire
Author notes
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A contest entry
- The Prompt Coffee House: Prompt Challenge Round 4: Random Phrases by Ceridwens Soul.
1050 points, ended October 11, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Not your conventional poet but a solo musician also
Comments
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This is Sept poem... hence being deleted... sorry...
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very good poem ... but you should have posted it in my other contest of rhyming poems.
This is a contest for free verse poems please.
Best wishes,
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A good use of couplets and a great take on the prompt. Thank you for sharing.
'how could i ever forget a thing like snow spring,
the bodies touch as silent skin starts quivering,'
simply a delight.
Jem and Ju -
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