I am watching you cry again
Tears falling from those big green eyes
You look so beautiful up there as you spin me in your little hand
I love the way you look at me with hatred yet lust for my touch
I am your best friend
Oh no please dont make another mark on your legs
But you dont listen and you do it anyway
Im dug inch deep into your thigh
You continue to cry
Im left covered in thick blood, but feeling so wanted
...I know that look
Youre still not satisfied are you?
Im pushed even further and harder into the slice
There, is that deep enough?!
You lean back and sigh
You are lucky you know
You are warm and have a heart, I am cold and emotionless
Even though you claim to be as numb as me
Your face now determining to stop or make one last cut
I wish you would just quit
So you smoke another cigarette
And hide me in the back of your drawer
If you love me so much, why do I have to stay concealed?
Fine I guess I dont deserve an answer that you cant answer for yourself
I will see you again
I just have to wait
Wait until you try on all the clothes in your closet and feel none of them fit right
Or wait until your boyfriend breaks your heart again
Youll be back, you always come back
A contest entry
- ERG........Whatever You Effin Want by fairytalelovestory.
400 points, ended October 6, 2008, 34 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What pain hides deep Inside of you? by XxTwiceDisturbedXx.
700 points, ended November 19, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
for a contest, this is wht i feel to believe my razor sees
Comments
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I've read several writes about cutting but I can honestly say this is the first I've ever seen from the razors point of view. This is a great write hun, and I hope things are better for you now.
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ya it was 4 the contest and i was really inspired by it....um there a bit better cuz ive been cut free for 2 months....its really "maybe hard but im trying to keep it tht way. ty 4 the comment <3
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WOW!! this is so amazing. well done babeeee.
your a great poet xx
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thank you hun
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wow this is really deep, and sad, i like the personification of the razor, it really makes this piece stand out, but it's still super sad to me, best of luck in the contest
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thank you, yea i kno.
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this is a really great poem..i can relate so well to the poem. I can feel the rage but pain at the same time...good job..good luck in the contest
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thank you, awww glad u like it...thanks again!
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i love that you write this from the razorz point of view...it was really good...
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thank you
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I am speechless
I absolutely love it. Ohgosh, I cant even give it a proper comment. Its just. Wow. Like. Just wow. Kudos, kudos. You have real talent. I wish I could write half as good as you. Im not quite sure what it is about yourpoems, but I must continue reading. That was just excellent. Just execellent.
Your new biggest fan,
-Tyleah, aka Tye-
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awww u are too sweet babe.... thanks so much 4 all ur comments i will have to check ur poems out now! glad to call you my biggest fan hun
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Winner deffinitely
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wow really?! thanks so much
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i love this sweetie ....sometimes tho i wish i had no idea how this feels, u know and how much u can relate...but it is amzing as always lol love ya
-lindsay xoxoxox
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good! yea i kno wht u mean. thanks 4 the comment hunni i love you too!
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oh my gosh i feel just like this all the time. i hide the pain away till it gets to much and dig out my little friend that hides away from the world and betray the better judgement to feel something other than that same pain
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exactly, glad u can relate
thanks 4 the comment and applause
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i hate this poem, you did a great job expressing the way a razor may feel, but i hate that you cut. you know it drives me crazy, keep writing
~love your wifey Amy
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thanks and yea i kno....im sorry....love you too babe
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this was great dool
it seemed so real,
like wow had me thinking a lot as well.
why is it that it is something some seem to love,
i love that they must hide
a pain to realt to let others see...great work
wish you nothing but the best.
love much..
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thanks, yea i kno. we hide it because we are afraid of wht others think or are ashamed of the need we have to continue to cut. thanks 4 ur comment
love ya xoxo
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different coming from you dear took e for a great loop i enjoyed this you did a very nice job good luck to you in the contest
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yea it is lol thanks 4 the comment. and hey i like ur new pic!!!
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Its really good Christina. You did a great job writing from the perspective of a cutters razor and you portrayed not only the razors point of view but also the emotions of the cutter. Its really a good poem Christina.
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thank you, i tried lol and should kno these feelings well. glad u liked it
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