God
Has no message
expressed by tongue
Has no gender
not old or young
Sees no evil
does no good
Drinks no wine
eats no food
Does not bless
hears no prayer
No bed for sleep
no restful chair
Gives no love
feels no hate
Has no home
has no fate
WE ARE THE MESSAGE
From human to rock
Each moment of time
Each hand on the clock
What we see what we do
Who we are through and through
Our beliefs and our loves
Our wars, push and shove
Our essence goes on
Through time and beyond
For once something is
It can never be gone
A contest entry
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I can't say I agree with all you say. I'm still stuck in the '80s with Poison belting out "Gimme Something to Believe In". LOL
I love this line of yours. I believe it wholeheartedly.
"Our influence plays out
Through time and beyond
For once something is
It can never be gone"
So true, my friend. Do we not leave shadows of ourselves...in the future, with new generations, in the past of pain, in obscure little journals that show up a century from now or even places like here, on AP? Should I die today, maybe no one will know that I am gone; however, my words will survive here (until AP goes belly-up)! hehehe
Thank you for your lovely words and your gracious entry.
Hope I don't seem too lame but it's been a long day - and alot of words, words, words!
Debbie
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Willing effort!
Best wishes to you in the contest ...
~ James ~
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Thank you for your entry...
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Thank you for your entry
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I am so proud of how boldly you wrote this!
Truly admire your poetic might and courage.
The ending message really digs deep:
"WE ARE THE MESSAGE
From human to rock
Each moment of time
Each hand on the clock
What we see what we do
Who we are through and through
Our beliefs and our loves
Our wars, push and shove"
i've written similar to this...
we are his hands...
and mighty FEAT.
you wrote so starkly, that it really
confronts us....
erasing all weary excuses..
bold of you indeed!
the "point" of your sword
was sharp...and a kind heart
hears the power in them too!
(fearfully even
flamesdragoness
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I dont' know what to say about this poem other then I think much of it is truth. It is a very good write and it is very well put. Thank you for sharing
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You asked for construcrive critisism, but I can't think of anything to crisize. It's simple and straight, it rhymes and it flows, it's intilectual as well as spiritual and it also gives the reader something to ponder and reflect upon.
Excellent writting!!!!
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Wow! Incredible
rhythm, rhyme and flow to this pen. With a depth I expected but still, I was very suprised. Great Write~
Namaste~
)O(
DragonBlue
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ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo prettyful!
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Well done!
A lot of powerful statements in this. -
I might not agree with everything you say in this poem, but you bring up a good idea. I cannot deny good poetry though! Lovely work
ing alone,
Mylee
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