How many arms have held you ?
and never wanted let go
how many how many I wonder
but never want to know
How many lips have kissed you ?
and set your soul a glow
how many how many I wonder
but never want to know
How hands have touched you ?
touch your very soul
how many how many I wonder
but never want to know
How many hearts have broken?
before yours found mine
how many how many I wonder
but never want to know
How tears have fallen ?
from your bright blue eyes
how many how many i wonder
but never want to know
Author notes
To the Storm of my heart and mind
I love you more each day
as you will my life joy and smiles
Iwant it no other way.
Please tell me what you think
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very nice, makes you think of things in the past.
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Well, the repetition was too much. After the second stanza, it was predictable, boring, cliche, so I didn't even bother reading the last two lines of the rest of the stanzas.
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OK THAT MAYBE YOUR OPINION BUT THAT DOESNT GIVE YOU THE RIGHT TO TEAR DOWN THIS PERSONS WORK .
SO FEEL FREE TO KEEP IT TO YOUR SELF YOUR SNOBBING COMMENTS THAT IS -
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If this person did not want honest comments then they should not have featured it for critical critiques. I suggest you mind your own business.
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beautiful! i love poems with repetition (at least when its well used) and i must say that this is the best poem i have read in some time!!
thankyou for submitting it, i always love to read good poetry, and it put a smile on my face
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This was a very profound poem, and it was impressive that you were able to use repetition in such a tasteful way that didn't get irritating.
The only change I would really make is adding a comma between each 'how many' in the repeating lines.
But thank you for sharing this; I think it captures a lot of unacknowledged feeling by a lot of people, and it was interesting to see something so common from your perspective. -
Great piece
A few suggestions
title How Many I Wonder
How many how many I wonder?
and never wanted to let go,
how many how many I wonder?
but never want tto know.
How many lips have kissed you?
and set your soul aglow,
how many how many I wonder?
but never want to know.
How many have touched you?
touched your very soul,
how many how many I wonder?
but never want to know.
How many hearts have been broken?
before yours found mine ,
how many how many I wonder?
through the hourglass of time.
How many tears have fallen?
from your bright blue eyes,
how many how many I wonder?
fed upon you with their lies.
Through the storm within my heart and mind,
I love you more each day.
As you will my life joy and smiles,
I want it no other way.
How many how many I wonder?
feels their loss this day.
How about that for your notes truly compleed this poem
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I love how the poem is so lifelike, in the fact that you always ask yourself the questions that you will never actually voice to your lover. A very moving write.
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"How many arms have held you ?
and never wanted let go "
Wow that is such a profound sentence, truly, it has set me thinking - and of the hugs that Ive given where I myself haven't wanted to let go ... you could run a contest with that as the prompt; indeed perhaps you should ... wow ...
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briliant i really like it well done xxxxx
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