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Cossatot

It didn't hurt

When the fish nibbled
Dangled fingers

When the water took the weight
Off sore scarred knees
And I floated through the decades
Back to childhood
To the womb

Golden treasure stones
alive in rippled light

Sound of snorkel loud
In sodden ears

I crept up on colorful crawfish
Pulled them apart for a fishy feast
Armor defeated
Small fish feasting

The big ones, with more to lose

Suspicious

Lounged by boulder and log
Jealous


Weight of the world lifted

Floated away



For a time

That passed
too soon

Author notes

Cossatot=Skull crusher. A white water river in SW Arkansas. Very difficult canoe, kayaking
I played in the pools

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  • Grunts Girl gold member
    January 27
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    alive in rippled light.. i found this the best line - loved that.
    here the big thing is octopus hunting.. when i was new here and didnt know anything other than nice sandy miami bottoms... i was out and this rock was changing colors yup i was pretty stupid not knowing it was an octopus all mad at me! lol


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 18, 2008
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    Beautiful write, stunning imagery and controlled memory.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Such a wonderful write to the prompt. I really enjoyed the read.

    Linda


  • Wandika gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    Nicely done

    I used more mudbugs for bait than I ever ate.

    Jim


  • JinSays gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    symbolism...alright. Prepare yourself, this is gonna be a loooong comment. . .LOL
    Crawfish. Acadian Saturday nights, saw horse tables, newspapers, and beer, beer, beer. New potatoes and corn on the cob, onion, celery and bell pepper (southern trinity)...and texjoy steak seasoning...
    (the BEST DAMNED STEAK SEASONING IN THE WORLD. . .AMEN)
    strung up lights, and floating on innertubes, in the Hilldebrandt bayou, with the snakes and the gators...Zydeco music playing low, somewhere down the waterline..funny, now that I think back, I swear I felt an aliveness unlike anything I ever knew. You Cajuns love the outdoors, no doubt about that.
    Say hello to a Louisiana crawfish for me today
    and thank you for bringing back a memory I had forgotten.
    Kind of like the smell of Ivory bathsoap...so many memories.
    Bless you Ben, and thank you.
    Much love,
    jin


  • Nangaleema
    September 30, 2008
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    vivid visual image transports the reader. spiritual.

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