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The Scarf of Pride

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The Scarf of Pride

 

‘Twas spun with love on wheel of wood
With threads of trust and womanhood
A scarf of pride I must confess
The crimson scarf I still possess

I wandered off the beaten path
Returning home to reap his wrath
Enchantment lost in his princess
The crimson scarf I still possess

I turned my head in forest dark
Another woman made her mark
Yet I should never love him less
The crimson scarf I still possess

The passionate poetic bride
Still has the crimson scarf of pride
Although my heart is in distress
The crimson scarf I still possess

 

 

 

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Art work by: Sarachmet

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  • Age of Rain
    October 15, 2008

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    Brilliant. Your repetition was spot on. Of course, that WAS the point. Heheh. Great work with this!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    Such a beautifully penned piece. I love the form, the flow and rhyme are perfect. I also really enjoyed the tale your words have woven. Superb work, thanks for entering and good luck


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Another winner

    But I shouldn't be surprised. This is a beauty. The form is superb and the story is brilliant. Good luck to you in the contest!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Beautifully written (of course), the kyrielle repeat adding a plaintiff sadness. Evocative lines and careful wordchoice, right out of your top drawer!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 30, 2008

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    Great strength in this poem, Sis. Usually I do not feel comfortable with these forms that depend on repetition of lines; this one, however, just feel right!

    Suggestion: the words "for to" in line 6 - this is just a matter of my personal taste, so you need not act on it - could you say "home" or "here" instead of "for"?

    Wonderful work - go get gold!


    • Amera gold member
      September 30, 2008

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      Thanks, "for" does sound a bit arcane for the tone of the poem.


      • Mairi bheag gold member
        September 30, 2008
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        Good edit. It just puts a wee bit of polish on an already good poem, to make it a fine one.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 29, 2008

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    So beautifully done! A sad story that really grips at the heart... this really is wonderfully written!!

    Perfect for the pic also!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 29, 2008

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    so sad but most well written!!! You did a beautiful job with this write!!! Your detail and description are magnificent!!! Your words flow beautifully!!! Amera you are amazing!!! I love it!!


  • Faeryn
    September 29, 2008

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    Wow. Sad but brilliantly written. Forget the guy who has caused you this much hurt. You are amazing.
    Love,
    Tay

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