I see the world afresh,
the new dawn is my cloak,
the sweet grass my eyes.
The faint bird song is my heartbeat.
Truths are unveiled,
prejudices unwritten,
and suddenly my ignorance is revealed to me.
If I could capture this moment, water it,
and let it grow ever stronger...
so I would.
Yet alas it does pass.
MY life is boxed in and standards are set.
I look back to my brief understanding.
Author notes
It's about when you just wake up and everything is clear. Then ooops it's gone
A contest entry
- ANYTHING .... but. by written-in-ink.
1000 points, ended October 19, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hope you like it.
Comments
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gah
i have that feeling a lot
but i think that you did an nice job of capturing it
and i think that you did very nice with everything
thank you so much for entering
and good luck -
NICE!!!!!!! (I'm hyper!)
This is really pretty and powerful...I love all the metaphors.
Great poem and good luck in the contest!
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Good poem Hannah!
Line 12 has an error though,
but otherwise it twas a great poem I enjoyed it =]
*KT*
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