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Usal vespers


redwoods chant the wind
light gray tan oaks sway in time
deep green ferns rustle

and all through the shadowed gloom
alder leaves fall like drizzle


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  • krystal balllll
    October 8, 2008
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    Wow so much meaning!


    • Zahhar gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Nature carries a great deal of meaning all in herself. A lazy poet need only call out her features to bestow ageless meaning to her poems.


  • heinzs silver member
    September 30, 2008
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    Excellent conveyance of Autumn's spirit in tanka form.


    • Zahhar gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Tankautumn. Autamnka. Tanka and autumn do seem to be a natural match.


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    September 30, 2008
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    As usual I am dazzled by your ability to paint a picture with words. Bravo


    • Zahhar gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Thank you, sir! I'm glad you like this one. You by any chance know where Usal Beach is?


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 29, 2008
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    This is an absolutely beautiful piece, I love your natural imagery here!

    • Zahhar gold member
      October 15, 2008
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      Natural imagery! Yes! Though I'm finding that it begins to feel repetitive after a few hundred poems of similar focus. I'm hoping to be able to add new layers of imagery, meaning and metaphor to my writing soon. One must self-educate to break through such barriers.

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