Bruised.
Black and blue, seeping through.
Inappropriate yearnings dispute responsibility.
Steady you step,
Stay in line,
don’t fall under.
Closing doors constrict vision but multiplies anxiety.
Counting days till procrastination.
Every inch of fear has turned a deeper shade of grey.
Dull colours fade altogether,
Melting in a rain of tears.
Clarity lost.
Goodbye.
Holding,
Grasping,
Clinging.
don’t leave.
Ambulance’s metronome.
Blearing from desperation.
Burning dreams fall and set alight the fire of depression.
Swallowed words choke you inside out.
Airways blocked,
You splutter.
Crowed room,
So alone.
One mind alone,
So crowded.
Thoughts screaming,
Piercing bonds never formed.
Lost confidence.
Distorted reality.
Slipping clutch,
Fall.
Depths of disillusion
Ill conceived conclusions.
Allure of numbed hurt.
Like a chocolate enticing,
You indigested the sweetened hook.
Prey caught,
Victims dead.
Motionless figures blur together.
Demise of life.
Hell has no vacancy.
So we’re left in between decisions.
Misplaced the punch line of our joke.
Why are you still laughing?
Innocence dangling…
Losing…
Losing….
Lose..
Lost.
Author notes
ok, so its the holidays, i'm alone, and im bored.
i started typing with no real regard for what the end conclusion was. i'd like to say i'll go back and fix the many flaws in this poem, but i've already lost the feeling.
so yeah. sorryy :/
A contest entry
- Teen Angst by Perfect-Pain.
333 points, ended October 24, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - To say goodbye by BleedingBlackTears.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
HONESTY is the BEST policy, but it also HURTS the most... so come on... {HURT me}
Comments
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Very nice, there is a lot of meaning to this poem, yet a lot to think about.
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Crowed room,
So alone.
One mind alone,
So crowded.
This feeling is indeed one that sticks with me well done
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remember this contest is for the genuinely hurting.if your not...well.... good write enjoyable to read i have to say i didnt find it sad,maybe because my sad and ur sad are a little different (alot) well done
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You can still fix the poem even if the emotion is gone. Sometimes I find it easier to work on a poem when my mind it's overly clouded with emotion... It's easier to focus on the words.
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One of the best I've seen in the contest so far.
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This was a different style than I'm used to reading from ya...I really liked it..It really captured the whole "ambulance" theme...gahh...I need a larger vocab...
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dont worry hun its great next week we have to catch up lurv u forever babe xoxoo kt
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i think it flows all nicely and i think the ending fits with what you started. i like it, like always =p
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