Is this suicidal roses
She yearns to know
He is handsome
He is all a girl could want
That grin is so cheeky
Lust becomes weakening
Is this suicidal roses
of that mystery unknown
His bed head hair
Curly and ever so cute
He plays his guitar in such fine tune
He's wanting to teach her too
Is this suicidal roses
The hunger for his embrace
She knows it's been years now
That she has longed for that day
Does she wreck her life
By what could be the most stupid Mistake
Suicidal roses
Are offered on this plate
Author notes
a way to look at a girl that is liking someone but with someone and the dilemma on her mind
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A contest entry
- Wow Me by BehindTheShadow.
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Comments
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I like the story, I like the imagery, I like your style, and I like your quite alternative take on the prompt. Suicidal roses, eh? That's clever. ;D
Love the repetition at the start of each stanza, and the concept behind the poem in general.
"His bed head hair
Curly and ever so cute"
Very very sweet and realistic. It's a poem from the heart, and makes me smile.
I like, indeed. Come to the next round. You've made the finalists.
Congrats! x
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I can see why you got a gold for this one.
I love to read poetry that tells a story. You really struck gold with this one.
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Wow Wow Wow This is wonderfully beautiful. Beaitifully written wonderful flow. Thanks for sharing. And congratulations on your gold.
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Beautifully written.
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wow what a great poem to read their is a certain shark that questions you in a way you have never question before.
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This is great! I liked how you describe the dilemma and how it ended... good luck!
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Wow!
Wicked, awesome thankyou so so much! X x
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Nice write. Good luck.
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