Wounded lovers dissected,
little pieces sewn together ,
making it what it is
a monstrous abomination of amore leftovers.
Count the scars
Twist in the electrodes
SHOCK IT BACK TO LIFE!
THROW THE FUCKING SWITCH !!!
Feed it lighting intravenously,
pumping passions into a shell,
just so the townsfolk will riot like hell !
Lynch that beast!
(in a soft pleading voice)
But it's just a project
the innards are
salvage from your rubbish of second hand love
your rebuked third fiddle
your played out toy
..an unwound yo yo of emotional games
a plastic gi joe of melted pride
styrofoam plane with lost rudder
pulled from a clogged gutter
a few pieces from Bradley's Operation
and the good doctors abandoned liver
Author notes
We live in deeds, not years; in thoughts, not breaths;
In feelings, not in figures on a dial." Philip James Bailey Festus
A contest entry
- Quotes--love, war, racism, politics, and so much more. by Kelsey-Jo.
1100 points, ended October 20, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Endeavers of the Heart by J Kard.
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Fantastic write. it had alot of energy, and very creative! kind of random at the end, made me laugh
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Thanx, far from random tho.
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"a monstrous abomination of amore leftovers." = Fantastic!
I love the energy in this piece! The use of capitals, very specific and rare punctuation, and terribly vivid images made me feel as if each line was simply building and building into something... horrific. And you didn't let me down. Kudos! Thank you so much for this well executed interpretation.
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thanks, this was a fun piece to write, and a blast to perform live. glad ya enjoyed.
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Wow! I loved the title; it fits the poem perfectly! Lots of imagery bombarding my brain with this one. I really enjoyed the part where you talked about bringing the "creation" to life.
"Feed it lighting intravenously,
pumping passions into a shell,
just so the townsfolk will riot like hell !" This was the most vivid part for me. I love the wording used to describe how you created the being, and with the reason of arousing the townspeople, to make them realize they need to stop living in figures, breaths, and years.
Very creative!! :]
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